Wednesday, September 03, 2008
Changes Essay responses; Eng. 201 PM class recap
Students who have posted their Change essays have received responses from Elesha. --Elesha is my student aide; she will be leading the study sessions once we figure out a meeting time. She is a great writer and can help you with your essays and reading assignments. Note her comments. I will hand you a graded paper back at our next meeting, probably Monday. Some students need to revise the essays. If you received a passing grade, C or better, you don't have to revise. If you have to revise the essay, please include a narrative as to what changed and why I should take a second look.
We are trying to gage when to host a study hour, make sure you sign the query in class. I will also post it here, so look for it and respond. Student success is a collaborative process; we learn from each other. Scholarship need not be isolated. We are a community and your individual success is our collective success.
Recap
Today in class, the afternoon class we burned up in A-200. Students had to take fresh air breaks it was that humid and unbearably hot. I am going to request a room change for next week if the college cannot guarantee proper ventilation. But you were troopers. We'll have to have ice cream, once my fast is over :-)
We read the preface (xv) in The Rose That Grew From Concrete, and practiced paraphrasing sentences. Quite a few a few students didn't have their books. Are any of you Sspire students? If so, your books are already paid for. I have emailed your names to the bookstore manager and she will give you your books. If you purchased them already, you can return them with a receipt. If you don't have a receipt, perhaps you can sell them to a classmate who doesn't have hers yet.
Students did the paraphrase activity together, and one student was to post the original sentence and the paraphrase for everyone. Include all the names.
The other assignment was summarizing. We read the Forward (xv) and the Introduction (xix). Students are to post their summaries or comments on these two parts of Rose on the blog also. You can post both in the same entry, just name them by the title of the section.
We read three poems from Rose: the title poem, "The Rose That Grew from Concrete," plus "In the Depths of Solitude," and "Sometimes I Cry" (pages 3-7).
Other homework
Read in Holler If You Hear Me: Introduction and I Always Wanted to Make a Book Out of My Life: pull out four (4) arguments Dyson poses re: Tupac as topic of academic inquiry.
You can write in your book. You don't have to post this, just note it somewhere. Include the argument and the why.
Old Homework
Post your Changes essay, if you haven't already done so, where the assignment is given (August 29, due date.) It is not late, ENG 201, 1-3. Students were to bring their essays to class for a peer review, but it was too hot, and we skipped that step. Post the essay.
I signed a lot of ADD Cards today. Please read the entire blog, plus student responses. This will give a sense of the culture of the class. Read the syllabus and the letter. Respond to the letter. Fill out the goals section of the syllabus for yourself. Give me an index card next week with your contact information, plus, the answers to my questions.
The presentations will begin next week on Hip Hop Culture, followed by American culture. Thanks to everyone who brought their objects. I didn't forget, it was just too warm. We'll start Monday, Sept. 8.
Tomorrow at 12:30-1:30 in the F-Bldg., student lounge, I am hosting a "What did you do over the summer," event. You can bring pictures and writing and stories to share with the college community, or you can just come. If you come, you can have extra credit for attending if you write something about it.
I think this is all...if I left something out, let me know :-)
We are trying to gage when to host a study hour, make sure you sign the query in class. I will also post it here, so look for it and respond. Student success is a collaborative process; we learn from each other. Scholarship need not be isolated. We are a community and your individual success is our collective success.
Recap
Today in class, the afternoon class we burned up in A-200. Students had to take fresh air breaks it was that humid and unbearably hot. I am going to request a room change for next week if the college cannot guarantee proper ventilation. But you were troopers. We'll have to have ice cream, once my fast is over :-)
We read the preface (xv) in The Rose That Grew From Concrete, and practiced paraphrasing sentences. Quite a few a few students didn't have their books. Are any of you Sspire students? If so, your books are already paid for. I have emailed your names to the bookstore manager and she will give you your books. If you purchased them already, you can return them with a receipt. If you don't have a receipt, perhaps you can sell them to a classmate who doesn't have hers yet.
Students did the paraphrase activity together, and one student was to post the original sentence and the paraphrase for everyone. Include all the names.
The other assignment was summarizing. We read the Forward (xv) and the Introduction (xix). Students are to post their summaries or comments on these two parts of Rose on the blog also. You can post both in the same entry, just name them by the title of the section.
We read three poems from Rose: the title poem, "The Rose That Grew from Concrete," plus "In the Depths of Solitude," and "Sometimes I Cry" (pages 3-7).
Other homework
Read in Holler If You Hear Me: Introduction and I Always Wanted to Make a Book Out of My Life: pull out four (4) arguments Dyson poses re: Tupac as topic of academic inquiry.
You can write in your book. You don't have to post this, just note it somewhere. Include the argument and the why.
Old Homework
Post your Changes essay, if you haven't already done so, where the assignment is given (August 29, due date.) It is not late, ENG 201, 1-3. Students were to bring their essays to class for a peer review, but it was too hot, and we skipped that step. Post the essay.
I signed a lot of ADD Cards today. Please read the entire blog, plus student responses. This will give a sense of the culture of the class. Read the syllabus and the letter. Respond to the letter. Fill out the goals section of the syllabus for yourself. Give me an index card next week with your contact information, plus, the answers to my questions.
The presentations will begin next week on Hip Hop Culture, followed by American culture. Thanks to everyone who brought their objects. I didn't forget, it was just too warm. We'll start Monday, Sept. 8.
Tomorrow at 12:30-1:30 in the F-Bldg., student lounge, I am hosting a "What did you do over the summer," event. You can bring pictures and writing and stories to share with the college community, or you can just come. If you come, you can have extra credit for attending if you write something about it.
I think this is all...if I left something out, let me know :-)
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Hello Professor Sabir.
I was wondering when we are to turn in our Changes essay? I had just read a few of your blogs and I am quite confused whether or not that I should have posted my essay already. If you can, please make a side note on your blog as to when you would like the essay and it's deadline. Here is my essay. If it is too late, please let me know, if not, I would like to also be informed, that way I will take more time into editing my work.
Thank you.
Dalena Tran
English 201A
1:00-2:50 PM
Education should always be a child’s first priority. As a child, my parents have always struggled into pushing me towards being more academically successful. I was born into a family with numbers of intellectual individuals. However, I have always felt like the white swan in a flock of pink flamingos. Since my freshman year, I was moved into a new school with a different environment, which has changed me physically, mentally, and emotionally. I knew from then on, my life would change.
My brother and I had been the only children throughout our family to be trapped in a private school environment. Our main focus has always been on going to school and earning good grades. Growing up in a secure atmosphere, we never had the idea of what the outside world was actually like. Until my freshman year, I discovered countless of information that I believed that happened outside the television screen: peer pressure existed. I never realized that appearances meant a lot to most teenagers. To fit in, I began developing the mind of peer pressure and tried changing my look as quickly as I could. I wanted to blend in with the rest of the crowd, for I was ashamed of my private school background. I noticed, from watching television soap operas and “true life” stories, that the latest trend for teens were being individuals. I began wearing clothes that did not suit me or anyone else, well. I made a ninety degrees rotate change. I even started having weight issues as I noticed many of the girls at school did also. ASTI was surrounded by fast food chains, which cause me to worry about not only my health but my weight. I tried wearing tighter clothes, but that did not help me. I began excising more and joined a sports team because I knew I would benefitted from maintaining a fit body. It was a changed that I never thought I would had ever cared for.
Since I was adapted to the private environment, I always believed that I was able to get whatever I wanted. However, coming to ASTI made me realize that I was fortunate to have parents that was able to work hard for me and give me al my materialistic needs whenever I wanted it. It was when I noticed that my new friends were at ASTI for a purpose. Their purpose was to get a full education and more, in order to obtain a better career for the future. Many of them made promises that one day, when they owned their enormous company that they would pay their parents back for everything that they provided them with. I was touched by that thought because I had never noticed how hard my parents were working. I had always thought that because they owned their own gas station, money was coming to them like containers of milk feeding babies. My parents have always told me that having a gas station was not as easy as it seemed because of the economy. That was when reality hit me, that everything was no longer easy for people to survive. Survival of the fittest was real.
I had never appreciated what my parents were doing for me. I never acknowledged the hard work my parents had to go through to keep my brother and I in a private school. Now that my brother was in college and my parents approved of me transferring into a “public” school, I began to grow a sense of guilt and care towards my parents. I remember the day it had hit me. The day that I realized how much I really did love my parents. My cousin and I began a conversation about the difference between her family and mine. She lived with a single parent and I lived with both of mine. She was forced to grow up maturely and motherly as I had my own mother to take care of me. She confessed her jealousy towards me, as she stated that every time she heard stories of my mother and I, bonding, she grew furious at me because I never appreciated those moments. It was like a slap in the face when she had mentioned how she remembered a day where I screamed at my mother for not leaving my laptop at home. I had another friend that I grew very close to. I had always thought she was the most precious daughter and student. It had never slipped into my mind that she was going through difficulties as well. She had a mother that has always adored her. Unfortunately, she had never contacted with her father. Her mother felt a deep guilt about the issue between the two of them and tried working as hard as she could to give her daughter a normal life. However, my friend was never a selfish child. She could care less about having brand named clothing or new gadgets. She was blessed with what she had; a roof over her head and food to live. Her story had touched me in so many ways. It was because of my cousin and my friend that I began to carefully examine my behavior and voice towards my parents.
I was surrounded by varieties of environment that I learned so many things to appreciate. ASTI provided individuals that came from different backgrounds. It had become a family to me. The people that I had known for such a short few years, impacted my life in a enormous amount. Not only had I changed physically, but I have grown mentally mature and my emotional side had increased.
I was wondering when we are to turn in our Changes essay? I had just read a few of your blogs and I am quite confused whether or not that I should have posted my essay already. If you can, please make a side note on your blog as to when you would like the essay and it's deadline. Here is my essay. If it is too late, please let me know, if not, I would like to also be informed, that way I will take more time into editing my work.
Thank you.
Dalena Tran
English 201A
1:00-2:50 PM
Education should always be a child’s first priority. As a child, my parents have always struggled into pushing me towards being more academically successful. I was born into a family with numbers of intellectual individuals. However, I have always felt like the white swan in a flock of pink flamingos. Since my freshman year, I was moved into a new school with a different environment, which has changed me physically, mentally, and emotionally. I knew from then on, my life would change.
My brother and I had been the only children throughout our family to be trapped in a private school environment. Our main focus has always been on going to school and earning good grades. Growing up in a secure atmosphere, we never had the idea of what the outside world was actually like. Until my freshman year, I discovered countless of information that I believed that happened outside the television screen: peer pressure existed. I never realized that appearances meant a lot to most teenagers. To fit in, I began developing the mind of peer pressure and tried changing my look as quickly as I could. I wanted to blend in with the rest of the crowd, for I was ashamed of my private school background. I noticed, from watching television soap operas and “true life” stories, that the latest trend for teens were being individuals. I began wearing clothes that did not suit me or anyone else, well. I made a ninety degrees rotate change. I even started having weight issues as I noticed many of the girls at school did also. ASTI was surrounded by fast food chains, which cause me to worry about not only my health but my weight. I tried wearing tighter clothes, but that did not help me. I began excising more and joined a sports team because I knew I would benefitted from maintaining a fit body. It was a changed that I never thought I would had ever cared for.
Since I was adapted to the private environment, I always believed that I was able to get whatever I wanted. However, coming to ASTI made me realize that I was fortunate to have parents that was able to work hard for me and give me al my materialistic needs whenever I wanted it. It was when I noticed that my new friends were at ASTI for a purpose. Their purpose was to get a full education and more, in order to obtain a better career for the future. Many of them made promises that one day, when they owned their enormous company that they would pay their parents back for everything that they provided them with. I was touched by that thought because I had never noticed how hard my parents were working. I had always thought that because they owned their own gas station, money was coming to them like containers of milk feeding babies. My parents have always told me that having a gas station was not as easy as it seemed because of the economy. That was when reality hit me, that everything was no longer easy for people to survive. Survival of the fittest was real.
I had never appreciated what my parents were doing for me. I never acknowledged the hard work my parents had to go through to keep my brother and I in a private school. Now that my brother was in college and my parents approved of me transferring into a “public” school, I began to grow a sense of guilt and care towards my parents. I remember the day it had hit me. The day that I realized how much I really did love my parents. My cousin and I began a conversation about the difference between her family and mine. She lived with a single parent and I lived with both of mine. She was forced to grow up maturely and motherly as I had my own mother to take care of me. She confessed her jealousy towards me, as she stated that every time she heard stories of my mother and I, bonding, she grew furious at me because I never appreciated those moments. It was like a slap in the face when she had mentioned how she remembered a day where I screamed at my mother for not leaving my laptop at home. I had another friend that I grew very close to. I had always thought she was the most precious daughter and student. It had never slipped into my mind that she was going through difficulties as well. She had a mother that has always adored her. Unfortunately, she had never contacted with her father. Her mother felt a deep guilt about the issue between the two of them and tried working as hard as she could to give her daughter a normal life. However, my friend was never a selfish child. She could care less about having brand named clothing or new gadgets. She was blessed with what she had; a roof over her head and food to live. Her story had touched me in so many ways. It was because of my cousin and my friend that I began to carefully examine my behavior and voice towards my parents.
I was surrounded by varieties of environment that I learned so many things to appreciate. ASTI provided individuals that came from different backgrounds. It had become a family to me. The people that I had known for such a short few years, impacted my life in a enormous amount. Not only had I changed physically, but I have grown mentally mature and my emotional side had increased.
# posted by 
: 7:28 PM
: 7:28 PM
Lisa Ryan
English 201A
MW 1:00-2:50
Fitness is the state of being physically fit, esp. as a result exercise and proper nutrition. The media (television, billboards, magazines and other media print) have convinced many in society that the image of fitness and health is someone who is skinny. This has completely excluded overweight people. Because of this society has brought into the notion that if you are skinny you are healthier, fit and happier. There are overweight people who are more physically fit than skinny people. Skinny people as well as overweight people should focus on improving their fitness which will lead to better physical health. The Center for Disease Control and Prevention and the National Cancer Institute show that overweight people appear to have longer life expectancies than so-called normal weight adults (The Ledger.com).
As a teenager and young adult I was always considered skinny. When I was thirty nine years old a close relative who was also a fitness trainer stated to me, “you need to get into shape”. I was offended at being told that I was out of shape, I thought to myself I’m not fat so how am I out of shape. But after looking at myself and accepting that I had put on a few extra pounds, and physical exercise was something that I had no interest in. Eventually, I decided to take on the challenge. In the beginning, I couldn’t walk a quarter of a mile without feeling like I was going to go into cardiac arrest and a million times I thought about quitting. My sister on the other hand who was overweight could walk a mile without a sweat. My sister works out regularly and will be participating in the 25 mile breast cancer walk. Although she is overweight I consider her to be in better physical health than I am. She has more endurance than me and has incorporated regular exercise into her daily life. In the past, I felt that I didn’t need to exercise like other people because I was not overweight, I was slim and I felt pretty good. But today my thinking has changed and I have made a commitment to better health through exercise. I will incorporate regular fitness exercise into my daily life and maintain my good eating habits so that I can experience the same rewards as an overweight person who is physically fit.
I believe that if you are skinny, have a good diet and are physically fit you will have less health problems and may even have a longer life expectancy. The same holds true for overweight people that are physically fit, they too will add years to their lives through regular exercise and better eating habits. About one out of four slim people who fall into the “healthy” weight range actually have at least two cardiovascular risk factors typically associated with obesity (The Ledger.com). Skinny people feel that they are physically fit and unlike overweight people don’t have to focus or work at being healthy. In a ten year research at the Cooper Institute for Aerobics Research, they found that overweight people can be just as fit and healthy as their leaner counterparts (An Invitation to Health, 2009-2010, pg. 195). The rewards of being fit include: a boost in energy, improvement in mood, decrease in stress, sleep patterns are likely to improve and a person generally feels better about themselves. Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
English 201A
MW 1:00-2:50
Fitness is the state of being physically fit, esp. as a result exercise and proper nutrition. The media (television, billboards, magazines and other media print) have convinced many in society that the image of fitness and health is someone who is skinny. This has completely excluded overweight people. Because of this society has brought into the notion that if you are skinny you are healthier, fit and happier. There are overweight people who are more physically fit than skinny people. Skinny people as well as overweight people should focus on improving their fitness which will lead to better physical health. The Center for Disease Control and Prevention and the National Cancer Institute show that overweight people appear to have longer life expectancies than so-called normal weight adults (The Ledger.com).
As a teenager and young adult I was always considered skinny. When I was thirty nine years old a close relative who was also a fitness trainer stated to me, “you need to get into shape”. I was offended at being told that I was out of shape, I thought to myself I’m not fat so how am I out of shape. But after looking at myself and accepting that I had put on a few extra pounds, and physical exercise was something that I had no interest in. Eventually, I decided to take on the challenge. In the beginning, I couldn’t walk a quarter of a mile without feeling like I was going to go into cardiac arrest and a million times I thought about quitting. My sister on the other hand who was overweight could walk a mile without a sweat. My sister works out regularly and will be participating in the 25 mile breast cancer walk. Although she is overweight I consider her to be in better physical health than I am. She has more endurance than me and has incorporated regular exercise into her daily life. In the past, I felt that I didn’t need to exercise like other people because I was not overweight, I was slim and I felt pretty good. But today my thinking has changed and I have made a commitment to better health through exercise. I will incorporate regular fitness exercise into my daily life and maintain my good eating habits so that I can experience the same rewards as an overweight person who is physically fit.
I believe that if you are skinny, have a good diet and are physically fit you will have less health problems and may even have a longer life expectancy. The same holds true for overweight people that are physically fit, they too will add years to their lives through regular exercise and better eating habits. About one out of four slim people who fall into the “healthy” weight range actually have at least two cardiovascular risk factors typically associated with obesity (The Ledger.com). Skinny people feel that they are physically fit and unlike overweight people don’t have to focus or work at being healthy. In a ten year research at the Cooper Institute for Aerobics Research, they found that overweight people can be just as fit and healthy as their leaner counterparts (An Invitation to Health, 2009-2010, pg. 195). The rewards of being fit include: a boost in energy, improvement in mood, decrease in stress, sleep patterns are likely to improve and a person generally feels better about themselves. Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
# posted by : 7:56 PM
: 7:56 PM
Change Outline
Thesis: Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
1. What is the subject of your paper? Health and Fitness
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? To dispel the myth that if you're skinny you are healthier and more fit than someone who is overweight.
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who believes the myth.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The benefits of fitness and health, whether you are skinny or overweight.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Problem/Solution.
Thesis: Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
1. What is the subject of your paper? Health and Fitness
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? To dispel the myth that if you're skinny you are healthier and more fit than someone who is overweight.
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who believes the myth.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The benefits of fitness and health, whether you are skinny or overweight.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Problem/Solution.
# posted by : 8:04 PM
: 8:04 PM
Lisa Ryan
English 201A
MW 1:00-2:50
Change Outline
Thesis: Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
1.What is the subject of your paper?
Health and Fitness between skinny and overweight people.
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? To dispel the myth that if you're skinny you are healthier and more fit than someone who is overweight.
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who believes the myth.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The benefits of fitness and health, whether you are skinny or overweight.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Problem/Solution.
English 201A
MW 1:00-2:50
Change Outline
Thesis: Overweight people can be in better physical shape than there skinny counterparts if they incorporate exercise and good eating habits into their daily lives.
1.What is the subject of your paper?
Health and Fitness between skinny and overweight people.
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? To dispel the myth that if you're skinny you are healthier and more fit than someone who is overweight.
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who believes the myth.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The benefits of fitness and health, whether you are skinny or overweight.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Problem/Solution.
# posted by : 8:11 PM
: 8:11 PM
Hi Professor Sabir,
i too was wondering when the change essay was due. I am sorry if i am submitting my essay late but below is my essay. Also it would be very helpful if you post the deadlines for the essay on your blog.
Thank you.
Melissa Mah
English 201A
1-2:50 pm
Changes Essay
When I was young I have always though that everything was served to me on a silver platter, but when I was forced to play the piano, I realized that everything is not always that way. Playing the piano not only help develop my music skills but as well as other important skills, like patience. By learning to play music has helped me become more independent. Piano had helped me develop skills that would better me as a person.
Piano has helped humbled me as a person. I hated my parents for forcing me to play the piano, because for once in my life, I had to work hard to be able to succeed. Everything wasn’t handed to me anymore, I now had responsibilities. It is my responsibility to practice and to play the piece right. I also learned to be patient because I knew that to successfully play the song well I needed to be patient. This is because piano pieces cannot be perfected in a day. I learned many skills from learning to play an instrument.
By learning to play the piano has taught me to become a more independent spirit. Whilst learning the piano, I found out that I could not always depend on the teacher to always be there to make my pieces sound better. I then learned to be more independent, and to not always depend on someone else, because you’ll never know if they will actually come and help. Practicing the piano also helped me become more independent, because practicing was my own time. The teacher wasn’t there to correct my mistakes; it was up to me to be able to play the pieces right and on beat. Also because my piano teacher could not take my examination for me. It is my job to pass the test and advance to the next level. Piano is an independent activity.
Music has helped me grow as a person. By learning to play the piano has taught me to appreciate what I have more and not to take things for granted. I learned that fashion trends come and go but the education I have learned from music will always stay the same. I learned not be disrespectful to those who are not as fortunate as I am and to appreciate the simpler things in life, rather then the materialistic ones. Learning to play the piano has changed my lie, it taught me that life will not always be easy, there are many obstacles you have to face to be able to get to where you want to be.
i too was wondering when the change essay was due. I am sorry if i am submitting my essay late but below is my essay. Also it would be very helpful if you post the deadlines for the essay on your blog.
Thank you.
Melissa Mah
English 201A
1-2:50 pm
Changes Essay
When I was young I have always though that everything was served to me on a silver platter, but when I was forced to play the piano, I realized that everything is not always that way. Playing the piano not only help develop my music skills but as well as other important skills, like patience. By learning to play music has helped me become more independent. Piano had helped me develop skills that would better me as a person.
Piano has helped humbled me as a person. I hated my parents for forcing me to play the piano, because for once in my life, I had to work hard to be able to succeed. Everything wasn’t handed to me anymore, I now had responsibilities. It is my responsibility to practice and to play the piece right. I also learned to be patient because I knew that to successfully play the song well I needed to be patient. This is because piano pieces cannot be perfected in a day. I learned many skills from learning to play an instrument.
By learning to play the piano has taught me to become a more independent spirit. Whilst learning the piano, I found out that I could not always depend on the teacher to always be there to make my pieces sound better. I then learned to be more independent, and to not always depend on someone else, because you’ll never know if they will actually come and help. Practicing the piano also helped me become more independent, because practicing was my own time. The teacher wasn’t there to correct my mistakes; it was up to me to be able to play the pieces right and on beat. Also because my piano teacher could not take my examination for me. It is my job to pass the test and advance to the next level. Piano is an independent activity.
Music has helped me grow as a person. By learning to play the piano has taught me to appreciate what I have more and not to take things for granted. I learned that fashion trends come and go but the education I have learned from music will always stay the same. I learned not be disrespectful to those who are not as fortunate as I am and to appreciate the simpler things in life, rather then the materialistic ones. Learning to play the piano has changed my lie, it taught me that life will not always be easy, there are many obstacles you have to face to be able to get to where you want to be.
# posted by : 8:46 PM
: 8:46 PM
I told students today in class to turn the essays in. If you look back at the "Changes" assignment, it says when to turn it in: August 29. You posted your essay in the wrong place. Repost it at the assignment link.
thanks!
WS
thanks!
WS
Joshua Brown-James
English 201A 1:00–2:50pm
August 31, 2008
Initial planning sheet
1. What is the subject of your paper? The subject of my essay is preparing to have a baby
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? I choose to write about this subject because this as one of the big changes in my life
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who is planning on having a baby.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The changes that are positive and negative of preparing to have a baby.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Positives and negatives.
Changes Outline
Thesis: Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable.
Body paragraphs: The different positive or negative changes I went through such as relationship change and emotional change.
Changes
Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable. When I first found out that I was having a baby I thought about all the changes that would happen to my life and I didn’t know how to deal with them. I would now how to sacrifice many things that I wasn’t too happy to give up. I went through emotional change, economic change, relationship and personal change. These are some of the changes I have gone through while preparing to have a baby. I had to take on many responsibilities like working to provide for my family which I wasn’t prepared to do at such a young age. This was a problem for me because I never had a job before and all of a sudden I had to find work immediately which was hard to cope with. I now had to manage all of my money and not just blow it because I had many things to buy for the baby that were expensive. At first I didn’t know how I was going to pay for everything because just one job wasn’t enough income to pay for everything I needed. A baby is a big responsibility that one has to be prepared for and this was a responsibility that I wasn’t prepared for.
The emotional change that I went through while preparing to have a baby was something that was greatly overwhelming. It was many times in which I felt like giving up but I knew this was something I couldn’t do. I had to please everyone my girlfriend, her parents and my parents. Everyone expected me and only me to do things that I thought was impossible. My girlfriend expected me to be there and do everything she wanted at that particular day and time. Our parent kept asking when we were going to get married which was something I wasn’t prepared to do. I was only eight teen and it was bad enough that I was having a baby at such a young age. I often thought that I was going to be a bad father because I didn’t know how to take care of a baby. This was what I thought about the most because I wanted so bad to be a great father but I didn’t see how that was possible. This made me go crazy but I had to put all of my emotional problems to the side in order to be a great dad and to take care of my family. My life was changed in various ways while preparing to have a baby that brought many problems that I wasn’t able to deal with. I had to take on many responsibilities. I went through emotional, economic, relationship and personal change. Changes are something that everyone goes through which makes their life different for better or worse. The change I went through changed my life for the worse at first because of the enormous responsibilities I had to take on. It also will change my life because just waiting for the day when I can see and hold my baby brings me great joy.
English 201A 1:00–2:50pm
August 31, 2008
Initial planning sheet
1. What is the subject of your paper? The subject of my essay is preparing to have a baby
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? I choose to write about this subject because this as one of the big changes in my life
3. What audience will you write for? Anyone who is planning on having a baby.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The changes that are positive and negative of preparing to have a baby.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? Positives and negatives.
Changes Outline
Thesis: Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable.
Body paragraphs: The different positive or negative changes I went through such as relationship change and emotional change.
Changes
Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable. When I first found out that I was having a baby I thought about all the changes that would happen to my life and I didn’t know how to deal with them. I would now how to sacrifice many things that I wasn’t too happy to give up. I went through emotional change, economic change, relationship and personal change. These are some of the changes I have gone through while preparing to have a baby. I had to take on many responsibilities like working to provide for my family which I wasn’t prepared to do at such a young age. This was a problem for me because I never had a job before and all of a sudden I had to find work immediately which was hard to cope with. I now had to manage all of my money and not just blow it because I had many things to buy for the baby that were expensive. At first I didn’t know how I was going to pay for everything because just one job wasn’t enough income to pay for everything I needed. A baby is a big responsibility that one has to be prepared for and this was a responsibility that I wasn’t prepared for.
The emotional change that I went through while preparing to have a baby was something that was greatly overwhelming. It was many times in which I felt like giving up but I knew this was something I couldn’t do. I had to please everyone my girlfriend, her parents and my parents. Everyone expected me and only me to do things that I thought was impossible. My girlfriend expected me to be there and do everything she wanted at that particular day and time. Our parent kept asking when we were going to get married which was something I wasn’t prepared to do. I was only eight teen and it was bad enough that I was having a baby at such a young age. I often thought that I was going to be a bad father because I didn’t know how to take care of a baby. This was what I thought about the most because I wanted so bad to be a great father but I didn’t see how that was possible. This made me go crazy but I had to put all of my emotional problems to the side in order to be a great dad and to take care of my family. My life was changed in various ways while preparing to have a baby that brought many problems that I wasn’t able to deal with. I had to take on many responsibilities. I went through emotional, economic, relationship and personal change. Changes are something that everyone goes through which makes their life different for better or worse. The change I went through changed my life for the worse at first because of the enormous responsibilities I had to take on. It also will change my life because just waiting for the day when I can see and hold my baby brings me great joy.
# posted by : 8:45 PM
: 8:45 PM
Stephanie Yu
English 201A
MW 1-2:50
Thesis (Declarative sentence)
The change in my life is immigrating to the United States and learning new language here.
1. Major Point (write as a complete sentence)
--evidence I didn’t know English at all while I came here.
--evidence Nobody help me with my homework and I felt helpless.
2. Major Point (write as a complete sentence)
--evidence I studied very hard and do my homework with my dictionary.
--evidence My English was improved and I can speak and listen a little English.
Concluding sentence
The change made me learn a new language, and made my story of hard working for the new language.
The change in my life was immigrating to the United States and learning new language here. This was a new life for me, I had to begin evrything strangely, I told myself before I come here.
Since I never study english, I didn't know english at all while I came here. And my parents, they didn't know english too. On my first day of high school, people all spoke english to me, but I didn't understand. And there were a lot of homework, but the problem was, too many words that I never seen before. People around me, they were poor in english also. So, nobody could help me with my homework. That was the first time I felt so helpless.
I knew I just can depend myself, I told myself that only I can help myself. So, I used dictionary for every word that I didn't know when I was doing my homework. And I studied very hard in english class. Because of my hard working, my english was improved, even my english is not as good as native students, but I can have convesaton with people in english.
This change made me learn new language, and made my story of hard working for the new language. That added a lot of new things into my life, and I think this change might make my life more interesting in the future.
English 201A
MW 1-2:50
Thesis (Declarative sentence)
The change in my life is immigrating to the United States and learning new language here.
1. Major Point (write as a complete sentence)
--evidence I didn’t know English at all while I came here.
--evidence Nobody help me with my homework and I felt helpless.
2. Major Point (write as a complete sentence)
--evidence I studied very hard and do my homework with my dictionary.
--evidence My English was improved and I can speak and listen a little English.
Concluding sentence
The change made me learn a new language, and made my story of hard working for the new language.
The change in my life was immigrating to the United States and learning new language here. This was a new life for me, I had to begin evrything strangely, I told myself before I come here.
Since I never study english, I didn't know english at all while I came here. And my parents, they didn't know english too. On my first day of high school, people all spoke english to me, but I didn't understand. And there were a lot of homework, but the problem was, too many words that I never seen before. People around me, they were poor in english also. So, nobody could help me with my homework. That was the first time I felt so helpless.
I knew I just can depend myself, I told myself that only I can help myself. So, I used dictionary for every word that I didn't know when I was doing my homework. And I studied very hard in english class. Because of my hard working, my english was improved, even my english is not as good as native students, but I can have convesaton with people in english.
This change made me learn new language, and made my story of hard working for the new language. That added a lot of new things into my life, and I think this change might make my life more interesting in the future.
# posted by : 12:05 AM
: 12:05 AM
Sara Yusufi
English 201A
MW 1-2:50 pm
Changes in My Lifetime
Living life as a teenager is a stage of our lives that we may never forget. Becoming a teenager and living life as a teenager has shown me the different faces of life. I was never able to realize if there were consequences to my actions. All the negative and positive changes in my life have been influenced by forces around me.
To just become a teenager and make friends with the wrong people was one of my mistakes. I had just begun my middle school years and I didn’t really understand the concept of the school. I thought that whatever the whole school did I was supposed to do as well. I was always teased about the way I dressed and the way I looked. I was tired of it and wanted to change so everyone would stop doing it. Then I realized that the important part of the whole school was to fit in and be “cool.” So I started hanging out with this group of sixth, seventh, and eighth graders but didn’t realize that they weren’t who I really thought they would be. They were always putting other people down either physically or with words. They seemed to enjoy it and they had me feeling the same. My parents realized that I had changed yet to me, I seemed fine and as if there were no changes. These kids that I had called friends lead me to do something I had never even thought of doing. Once during the eighth grade we had a substitute teacher for our science class. And during the time our class was taking place the sixth and some seventh graders were having lunch. So we all left class to go out to lunch and were almost caught by the vice principal; but we kept running. It was after that day that I realized that I had wasted my three years at middle school by doing all the wrong things. I could have been more focused on my academics but instead I focused on the wrong side. I thought that maybe I could change in high school and forget my past.
I started high school in Alameda Science and Technology Institute, ASTI, as a freshman in the year of 2006. I realized that it was completely different; school was focused more on the academics rather than looks. But there was something that I felt I didn’t blend in it. I felt I wasn’t skinny enough like all the other girls. My friends outside of ASTI were skinny and most girls at my school were also. I thought why can’t I do the same? I didn’t know how to do it so I thought the best solution was not eating. I would skip meals, eat less, and sleep more because I thought it would help. Finally, I noticed none of it was working so I didn’t eat anything for five straight days; all I did was drink water. I did get skinny; I looked like a walking skeleton. I didn’t even pay attention to what I was doing until I got sick. Then my mom told me that I am a beautiful girl both on the inside and outside and by being skinny doesn’t change it. She told me a person will always be the same no matter what they look like. So I completely forgot about looks and focused on my education.
I started to focus more on becoming a positive person rather than the negative person I seemed to be. I joined Girls Incorporated during the summer of 2008. I was a teacher assistant and my job was to help the little girls become strong, smart, and bold. At the same time it was inspiring me to become a much stronger person. I loved working with the girls because I was able to learn from their life and help them at the same time. Girls Inc. was an experience that lasted about six weeks that will be a lifetime memory. To be able to work with little girls and know that I was able to make a change in their life is just amazing. It leaves me feeling great inside knowing that I can be a positive person. And at the same time have very positive changes in my life.
Lastly, I am a junior at ASTI and am a full time college and high school student. I am very proud of myself to be able to reach such a great change in my life even after all the negative parts of life I faced. I wish I could have kept this up when I was younger. I have learned the importance of my education and how it can help me. I try to stay in this path because all the other paths I tried never lead me to my goal. Being in middle school and trying to fit in, I never really accomplished it but rather I wasted my time. I pretty much did that with all the little mistakes I made in my life.
These positive and negative changes in life just helped me see the different face of life. I didn’t expect to experience all of this within the first few years of my teenage years. I want to live the rest of the high school years and teenage years with more positive changes. I want to forget the past and live the future. Sometimes changes in life can cause different situations in your life to the point where you are left helpless. It is better to be wise and watch your actions and be sure to make decisions for yourself. Life has definitely shown me my ups and downs and I think all of these changes have shown me to make more positive adjustments.
English 201A
MW 1-2:50 pm
Changes in My Lifetime
Living life as a teenager is a stage of our lives that we may never forget. Becoming a teenager and living life as a teenager has shown me the different faces of life. I was never able to realize if there were consequences to my actions. All the negative and positive changes in my life have been influenced by forces around me.
To just become a teenager and make friends with the wrong people was one of my mistakes. I had just begun my middle school years and I didn’t really understand the concept of the school. I thought that whatever the whole school did I was supposed to do as well. I was always teased about the way I dressed and the way I looked. I was tired of it and wanted to change so everyone would stop doing it. Then I realized that the important part of the whole school was to fit in and be “cool.” So I started hanging out with this group of sixth, seventh, and eighth graders but didn’t realize that they weren’t who I really thought they would be. They were always putting other people down either physically or with words. They seemed to enjoy it and they had me feeling the same. My parents realized that I had changed yet to me, I seemed fine and as if there were no changes. These kids that I had called friends lead me to do something I had never even thought of doing. Once during the eighth grade we had a substitute teacher for our science class. And during the time our class was taking place the sixth and some seventh graders were having lunch. So we all left class to go out to lunch and were almost caught by the vice principal; but we kept running. It was after that day that I realized that I had wasted my three years at middle school by doing all the wrong things. I could have been more focused on my academics but instead I focused on the wrong side. I thought that maybe I could change in high school and forget my past.
I started high school in Alameda Science and Technology Institute, ASTI, as a freshman in the year of 2006. I realized that it was completely different; school was focused more on the academics rather than looks. But there was something that I felt I didn’t blend in it. I felt I wasn’t skinny enough like all the other girls. My friends outside of ASTI were skinny and most girls at my school were also. I thought why can’t I do the same? I didn’t know how to do it so I thought the best solution was not eating. I would skip meals, eat less, and sleep more because I thought it would help. Finally, I noticed none of it was working so I didn’t eat anything for five straight days; all I did was drink water. I did get skinny; I looked like a walking skeleton. I didn’t even pay attention to what I was doing until I got sick. Then my mom told me that I am a beautiful girl both on the inside and outside and by being skinny doesn’t change it. She told me a person will always be the same no matter what they look like. So I completely forgot about looks and focused on my education.
I started to focus more on becoming a positive person rather than the negative person I seemed to be. I joined Girls Incorporated during the summer of 2008. I was a teacher assistant and my job was to help the little girls become strong, smart, and bold. At the same time it was inspiring me to become a much stronger person. I loved working with the girls because I was able to learn from their life and help them at the same time. Girls Inc. was an experience that lasted about six weeks that will be a lifetime memory. To be able to work with little girls and know that I was able to make a change in their life is just amazing. It leaves me feeling great inside knowing that I can be a positive person. And at the same time have very positive changes in my life.
Lastly, I am a junior at ASTI and am a full time college and high school student. I am very proud of myself to be able to reach such a great change in my life even after all the negative parts of life I faced. I wish I could have kept this up when I was younger. I have learned the importance of my education and how it can help me. I try to stay in this path because all the other paths I tried never lead me to my goal. Being in middle school and trying to fit in, I never really accomplished it but rather I wasted my time. I pretty much did that with all the little mistakes I made in my life.
These positive and negative changes in life just helped me see the different face of life. I didn’t expect to experience all of this within the first few years of my teenage years. I want to live the rest of the high school years and teenage years with more positive changes. I want to forget the past and live the future. Sometimes changes in life can cause different situations in your life to the point where you are left helpless. It is better to be wise and watch your actions and be sure to make decisions for yourself. Life has definitely shown me my ups and downs and I think all of these changes have shown me to make more positive adjustments.
# posted by : 12:59 PM
: 12:59 PM
Sara Yusufi
English 201A
MW 1-2:50 pm
Changes in My Lifetime
Living life as a teenager is a stage of our lives that we may never forget. Becoming a teenager and living life as a teenager has shown me the different faces of life. I was never able to realize if there were consequences to my actions. All the negative and positive changes in my life have been influenced by forces around me.
To just become a teenager and make friends with the wrong people was one of my mistakes. I had just begun my middle school years and I didn’t really understand the concept of the school. I thought that whatever the whole school did I was supposed to do as well. I was always teased about the way I dressed and the way I looked. I was tired of it and wanted to change so everyone would stop doing it. Then I realized that the important part of the whole school was to fit in and be “cool.” So I started hanging out with this group of sixth, seventh, and eighth graders but didn’t realize that they weren’t who I really thought they would be. They were always putting other people down either physically or with words. They seemed to enjoy it and they had me feeling the same. My parents realized that I had changed yet to me, I seemed fine and as if there were no changes. These kids that I had called friends lead me to do something I had never even thought of doing. Once during the eighth grade we had a substitute teacher for our science class. And during the time our class was taking place the sixth and some seventh graders were having lunch. So we all left class to go out to lunch and were almost caught by the vice principal; but we kept running. It was after that day that I realized that I had wasted my three years at middle school by doing all the wrong things. I could have been more focused on my academics but instead I focused on the wrong side. I thought that maybe I could change in high school and forget my past.
I started high school in Alameda Science and Technology Institute, ASTI, as a freshman in the year of 2006. I realized that it was completely different; school was focused more on the academics rather than looks. But there was something that I felt I didn’t blend in it. I felt I wasn’t skinny enough like all the other girls. My friends outside of ASTI were skinny and most girls at my school were also. I thought why can’t I do the same? I didn’t know how to do it so I thought the best solution was not eating. I would skip meals, eat less, and sleep more because I thought it would help. Finally, I noticed none of it was working so I didn’t eat anything for five straight days; all I did was drink water. I did get skinny; I looked like a walking skeleton. I didn’t even pay attention to what I was doing until I got sick. Then my mom told me that I am a beautiful girl both on the inside and outside and by being skinny doesn’t change it. She told me a person will always be the same no matter what they look like. So I completely forgot about looks and focused on my education.
I started to focus more on becoming a positive person rather than the negative person I seemed to be. I joined Girls Incorporated during the summer of 2008. I was a teacher assistant and my job was to help the little girls become strong, smart, and bold. At the same time it was inspiring me to become a much stronger person. I loved working with the girls because I was able to learn from their life and help them at the same time. Girls Inc. was an experience that lasted about six weeks that will be a lifetime memory. To be able to work with little girls and know that I was able to make a change in their life is just amazing. It leaves me feeling great inside knowing that I can be a positive person. And at the same time have very positive changes in my life.
Lastly, I am a junior at ASTI and am a full time college and high school student. I am very proud of myself to be able to reach such a great change in my life even after all the negative parts of life I faced. I wish I could have kept this up when I was younger. I have learned the importance of my education and how it can help me. I try to stay in this path because all the other paths I tried never lead me to my goal. Being in middle school and trying to fit in, I never really accomplished it but rather I wasted my time. I pretty much did that with all the little mistakes I made in my life.
These positive and negative changes in life just helped me see the different face of life. I didn’t expect to experience all of this within the first few years of my teenage years. I want to live the rest of the high school years and teenage years with more positive changes. I want to forget the past and live the future. Sometimes changes in life can cause different situations in your life to the point where you are left helpless. It is better to be wise and watch your actions and be sure to make decisions for yourself. Life has definitely shown me my ups and downs and I think all of these changes have shown me to make more positive adjustments.
English 201A
MW 1-2:50 pm
Changes in My Lifetime
Living life as a teenager is a stage of our lives that we may never forget. Becoming a teenager and living life as a teenager has shown me the different faces of life. I was never able to realize if there were consequences to my actions. All the negative and positive changes in my life have been influenced by forces around me.
To just become a teenager and make friends with the wrong people was one of my mistakes. I had just begun my middle school years and I didn’t really understand the concept of the school. I thought that whatever the whole school did I was supposed to do as well. I was always teased about the way I dressed and the way I looked. I was tired of it and wanted to change so everyone would stop doing it. Then I realized that the important part of the whole school was to fit in and be “cool.” So I started hanging out with this group of sixth, seventh, and eighth graders but didn’t realize that they weren’t who I really thought they would be. They were always putting other people down either physically or with words. They seemed to enjoy it and they had me feeling the same. My parents realized that I had changed yet to me, I seemed fine and as if there were no changes. These kids that I had called friends lead me to do something I had never even thought of doing. Once during the eighth grade we had a substitute teacher for our science class. And during the time our class was taking place the sixth and some seventh graders were having lunch. So we all left class to go out to lunch and were almost caught by the vice principal; but we kept running. It was after that day that I realized that I had wasted my three years at middle school by doing all the wrong things. I could have been more focused on my academics but instead I focused on the wrong side. I thought that maybe I could change in high school and forget my past.
I started high school in Alameda Science and Technology Institute, ASTI, as a freshman in the year of 2006. I realized that it was completely different; school was focused more on the academics rather than looks. But there was something that I felt I didn’t blend in it. I felt I wasn’t skinny enough like all the other girls. My friends outside of ASTI were skinny and most girls at my school were also. I thought why can’t I do the same? I didn’t know how to do it so I thought the best solution was not eating. I would skip meals, eat less, and sleep more because I thought it would help. Finally, I noticed none of it was working so I didn’t eat anything for five straight days; all I did was drink water. I did get skinny; I looked like a walking skeleton. I didn’t even pay attention to what I was doing until I got sick. Then my mom told me that I am a beautiful girl both on the inside and outside and by being skinny doesn’t change it. She told me a person will always be the same no matter what they look like. So I completely forgot about looks and focused on my education.
I started to focus more on becoming a positive person rather than the negative person I seemed to be. I joined Girls Incorporated during the summer of 2008. I was a teacher assistant and my job was to help the little girls become strong, smart, and bold. At the same time it was inspiring me to become a much stronger person. I loved working with the girls because I was able to learn from their life and help them at the same time. Girls Inc. was an experience that lasted about six weeks that will be a lifetime memory. To be able to work with little girls and know that I was able to make a change in their life is just amazing. It leaves me feeling great inside knowing that I can be a positive person. And at the same time have very positive changes in my life.
Lastly, I am a junior at ASTI and am a full time college and high school student. I am very proud of myself to be able to reach such a great change in my life even after all the negative parts of life I faced. I wish I could have kept this up when I was younger. I have learned the importance of my education and how it can help me. I try to stay in this path because all the other paths I tried never lead me to my goal. Being in middle school and trying to fit in, I never really accomplished it but rather I wasted my time. I pretty much did that with all the little mistakes I made in my life.
These positive and negative changes in life just helped me see the different face of life. I didn’t expect to experience all of this within the first few years of my teenage years. I want to live the rest of the high school years and teenage years with more positive changes. I want to forget the past and live the future. Sometimes changes in life can cause different situations in your life to the point where you are left helpless. It is better to be wise and watch your actions and be sure to make decisions for yourself. Life has definitely shown me my ups and downs and I think all of these changes have shown me to make more positive adjustments.
# posted by : 1:00 PM
: 1:00 PM
Introduction
Thesis: I feel that college will help me make better decisions in my everyday life.
The first major point that I will be stating is how changing my life will make a better me.
Instead of sitting at home watching T.V. I am at school.
Instead of getting up late in the morning and doing nothing with my day I have enrolled myself into school.
Instead of glancing at books I am reading books for classes that I am enrolled in.
My second major point is what changes need to be made.
Do I want to be at school bettering myself?
Stop being lazy and broaden my horizon which means get up and explore my mind.
I have come to realize that in order for me to feel good about myself daily I need a change. But people don’t know that they need to change or may not want to change but changing is making a better person, changing wants to broaden your horizon, and most of all gain all knowledge you can out of life.
Albert Dennie
8/29/2008 Eng201A 1- 2:50
College can help students make healthy decisions.
College can help make healthy decisions by broadening their mind to things unknown by a particular person. A way I think college can help is by getting students to open a book and not just read the fine print. College teaches us students to “annotate” and absorb what we are reading for a better understanding.
To me the first step was leaving the T.V. alone and enrolling in school which is what I did. I felt that my mind needed to be nourished with knowledge and an unsure feeling of knowledge is what got me up. Instead of getting up late in the morning and lying around till noon I figured I would make good use of my time and waste it intelligently. I enrolled in school and my mind is now focused and most of all I am learning new thing son a daily basis. I was used to picking up a book and reading to just be reading. Now I am taking every sentence and putting it in my own context. To make sure I have clear understanding.
In my case it is safe to say that college is helping me make better decisions about my life. My mind healthy and able to think, it is no longer cluttered with making decisions that will not benefit me. “There is no turning back success is starring at me and it is also knocking at my door”.
Thesis: I feel that college will help me make better decisions in my everyday life.
The first major point that I will be stating is how changing my life will make a better me.
Instead of sitting at home watching T.V. I am at school.
Instead of getting up late in the morning and doing nothing with my day I have enrolled myself into school.
Instead of glancing at books I am reading books for classes that I am enrolled in.
My second major point is what changes need to be made.
Do I want to be at school bettering myself?
Stop being lazy and broaden my horizon which means get up and explore my mind.
I have come to realize that in order for me to feel good about myself daily I need a change. But people don’t know that they need to change or may not want to change but changing is making a better person, changing wants to broaden your horizon, and most of all gain all knowledge you can out of life.
Albert Dennie
8/29/2008 Eng201A 1- 2:50
College can help students make healthy decisions.
College can help make healthy decisions by broadening their mind to things unknown by a particular person. A way I think college can help is by getting students to open a book and not just read the fine print. College teaches us students to “annotate” and absorb what we are reading for a better understanding.
To me the first step was leaving the T.V. alone and enrolling in school which is what I did. I felt that my mind needed to be nourished with knowledge and an unsure feeling of knowledge is what got me up. Instead of getting up late in the morning and lying around till noon I figured I would make good use of my time and waste it intelligently. I enrolled in school and my mind is now focused and most of all I am learning new thing son a daily basis. I was used to picking up a book and reading to just be reading. Now I am taking every sentence and putting it in my own context. To make sure I have clear understanding.
In my case it is safe to say that college is helping me make better decisions about my life. My mind healthy and able to think, it is no longer cluttered with making decisions that will not benefit me. “There is no turning back success is starring at me and it is also knocking at my door”.
# posted by : 12:37 PM
: 12:37 PM
September 3, 2008
Janice Ratcliff
English 201-B
Mon/Wed (1-2:50)
Ms. Wanda Sabir
Changing My Terrible Eating Habit
I have a few changes that I need to make but what is important right now is changing my terrible eating habits. Eating terrible is not good, why? Because it can cause all kinds of health problems like, heart disease, diabetes, respiratory problem, weight gain, etc; it also affect the inner body as well as the outer body. How can it affect my inner body? It can lead you to be emotionally depressed which lead to suicidal, loosing your self- esteem, not wanting to be around people, and can cause you to fall into a deep depression. If I am planning on working until I am at least 67years of age (retirement), I need to take better care of myself. So, how am I going to do that?. First, I need to make better healthy food choices like for instance, instead of getting a donut, get a fruit, or instead of fried rice get brown rice, there are so many great choices of foods to eat. Another important factor is drinking plenty of water and staying active.
Drinking plenty of water help flushes the kidney, increase bad skin problems and it get rid of toxic waste. Staying active help you with your stamina, strong heart, tone your muscles, and most importantly you will feel fantastic about yourself and live a great long healthy life.
What is the difference between unhealthiness and healthiness? Unhealthiness can mean retiring early from a bad health condition cause by not eating right and healthy eating can mean working until you reach your retirement and feeling great. Which one do you want to be? It is always your choice.
Janice Ratcliff
English 201-B
Mon/Wed (1-2:50)
Ms. Wanda Sabir
Changing My Terrible Eating Habit
I have a few changes that I need to make but what is important right now is changing my terrible eating habits. Eating terrible is not good, why? Because it can cause all kinds of health problems like, heart disease, diabetes, respiratory problem, weight gain, etc; it also affect the inner body as well as the outer body. How can it affect my inner body? It can lead you to be emotionally depressed which lead to suicidal, loosing your self- esteem, not wanting to be around people, and can cause you to fall into a deep depression. If I am planning on working until I am at least 67years of age (retirement), I need to take better care of myself. So, how am I going to do that?. First, I need to make better healthy food choices like for instance, instead of getting a donut, get a fruit, or instead of fried rice get brown rice, there are so many great choices of foods to eat. Another important factor is drinking plenty of water and staying active.
Drinking plenty of water help flushes the kidney, increase bad skin problems and it get rid of toxic waste. Staying active help you with your stamina, strong heart, tone your muscles, and most importantly you will feel fantastic about yourself and live a great long healthy life.
What is the difference between unhealthiness and healthiness? Unhealthiness can mean retiring early from a bad health condition cause by not eating right and healthy eating can mean working until you reach your retirement and feeling great. Which one do you want to be? It is always your choice.
# posted by : 10:38 PM
: 10:38 PM
Janice Ratcliff
English 201-B
1-2:50
Foreward: Tupac, CU in Heaven
Nikki Giovanni, speaks on how talented and special Tupac was. Tupac talent was well-know in hollywood where he starred in a few movies.
Nikki also states that how people judge you on every little thing especially if your are in the public eye, and Tupac was very well known as a gangster rapper using foul and degrading words.
Tupac stayed true and strong to his people. He not just give love but he love through his music.
English 201-B
1-2:50
Foreward: Tupac, CU in Heaven
Nikki Giovanni, speaks on how talented and special Tupac was. Tupac talent was well-know in hollywood where he starred in a few movies.
Nikki also states that how people judge you on every little thing especially if your are in the public eye, and Tupac was very well known as a gangster rapper using foul and degrading words.
Tupac stayed true and strong to his people. He not just give love but he love through his music.
# posted by : 11:20 PM
: 11:20 PM
Janice Ratcliff
English 201-B
1-2:50
Introduction:
Leila Steinberg, saw Tupac as an intelligent, honest and respectable man, who wrote with compassion. Tupac wrote from what he had gone through, which Leila could not let pass by.
Tupac is the rose that was windling down, but through his strenght he became strong and blossom into a leader.
Through Tupac death his poems and literature still lives on through us.
English 201-B
1-2:50
Introduction:
Leila Steinberg, saw Tupac as an intelligent, honest and respectable man, who wrote with compassion. Tupac wrote from what he had gone through, which Leila could not let pass by.
Tupac is the rose that was windling down, but through his strenght he became strong and blossom into a leader.
Through Tupac death his poems and literature still lives on through us.
# posted by : 11:33 PM
: 11:33 PM
re: essay by Dalena Tran
Excellent essay. You articulated yourself extremely well, and were right on point with the assignment.
Excellent essay. You articulated yourself extremely well, and were right on point with the assignment.
re: essay by Melissa Mah
There is a lot of repetition in the context of your essay. I would advise you to re-evaluate the text and revise. Elaborate a bit more on the experience and how it has changed you.
There is a lot of repetition in the context of your essay. I would advise you to re-evaluate the text and revise. Elaborate a bit more on the experience and how it has changed you.
English 201A-B
1:2:50
Paired in Groups: Janice Ratcliif, Stephanie Yu and Michael Chang
Paraphrasing: I have nothing to add or detract-my responsiblity is to do all I can to make sure he has been heard in venues and milieus that are appropriate to what he himself gave to his life and his work.
Afeni Shakur, eventhough she has not been there for Tupac, Afeni has giving him the environment setting to speak on.
1:2:50
Paired in Groups: Janice Ratcliif, Stephanie Yu and Michael Chang
Paraphrasing: I have nothing to add or detract-my responsiblity is to do all I can to make sure he has been heard in venues and milieus that are appropriate to what he himself gave to his life and his work.
Afeni Shakur, eventhough she has not been there for Tupac, Afeni has giving him the environment setting to speak on.
# posted by : 11:49 PM
: 11:49 PM
English 201A-B
1:2:50
Paired in Groups: Janice Ratcliif, Stephanie Yu and Michael Chang
Paraphrasing: I have nothing to add or detract-my responsiblity is to do all I can to make sure he has been heard in venues and milieus that are appropriate to what he himself gave to his life and his work.
Afeni Shakur, eventhough she has not been there for Tupac, Afeni has giving him the environment setting to speak on.
1:2:50
Paired in Groups: Janice Ratcliif, Stephanie Yu and Michael Chang
Paraphrasing: I have nothing to add or detract-my responsiblity is to do all I can to make sure he has been heard in venues and milieus that are appropriate to what he himself gave to his life and his work.
Afeni Shakur, eventhough she has not been there for Tupac, Afeni has giving him the environment setting to speak on.
# posted by : 11:49 PM
: 11:49 PM
re: essay by Stephanie Yu
Wow, I am delighted by the fact that although English is not you native language, you still possessed the ability to get your point across while staying on topic. Great job. Keep studying and improving your writing/English skills.
Wow, I am delighted by the fact that although English is not you native language, you still possessed the ability to get your point across while staying on topic. Great job. Keep studying and improving your writing/English skills.
Joshua Brown-James
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Summary of Introduction
In the introduction of the book The Rose That grew From Concrete by Leila Steinberg, it talks about how Leila first met Tupac which was in an elementary school where Tupac introduced himself to her. His intelligence fascinated her and she invited him to one of her classes where Tupac showed his artistic capabilities to her and she saw that he was more advanced than many others. It talked about how she became his manager but unfortunately he was killed years later and the poetry they worked on together she began to use it as a teaching to and she and Tupacs mother began to travel the world to spread his music and beliefs with everyone.
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Summary of Introduction
In the introduction of the book The Rose That grew From Concrete by Leila Steinberg, it talks about how Leila first met Tupac which was in an elementary school where Tupac introduced himself to her. His intelligence fascinated her and she invited him to one of her classes where Tupac showed his artistic capabilities to her and she saw that he was more advanced than many others. It talked about how she became his manager but unfortunately he was killed years later and the poetry they worked on together she began to use it as a teaching to and she and Tupacs mother began to travel the world to spread his music and beliefs with everyone.
# posted by : 10:17 PM
: 10:17 PM
Joshua Brown-James
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Paraphrasing:
Tupac had quite a few friends whose actions regarding his artistic integrity reflect a subconscious belief that he is still in the room.
Through Tupac's music that he recorded that had such strong statements his friends believed that he is still alive now because his music continues to live.
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Paraphrasing:
Tupac had quite a few friends whose actions regarding his artistic integrity reflect a subconscious belief that he is still in the room.
Through Tupac's music that he recorded that had such strong statements his friends believed that he is still alive now because his music continues to live.
# posted by : 10:26 PM
: 10:26 PM
Joshua Brown-James
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Summary of Forward
In the Forward C U in Heaven by Nikki Giovanni from the book The Rose That grew From Concrete, she talks about how Tupac was an intelligent man who was not given the respect and acknowledgment that he deserved because of the gangster rap that he put out with the foul language. She talked about how Tupac knew that "no one could judge him but god," so he didn't care what they thought of him he was going to stay true to his people and beliefs no matter what. Nikki states that "she wants an image of the thoughtful Tupac with the words C U in Heaven."
English 201A
1-2:50pm
Summary of Forward
In the Forward C U in Heaven by Nikki Giovanni from the book The Rose That grew From Concrete, she talks about how Tupac was an intelligent man who was not given the respect and acknowledgment that he deserved because of the gangster rap that he put out with the foul language. She talked about how Tupac knew that "no one could judge him but god," so he didn't care what they thought of him he was going to stay true to his people and beliefs no matter what. Nikki states that "she wants an image of the thoughtful Tupac with the words C U in Heaven."
# posted by : 10:42 PM
: 10:42 PM
Many times in life I come across the word "change." Although, the phrase "change" is said for good purposes it is also said for challenging purposes as well. When death of a loved one occurs in life, change in that situation I find the most challenging because it is a permanent change. A good change on the other hand has to do with the individual who consist on self-discipline and growth. I learned about changing myself the uneasy way. By me hurting others feelings that I did care about, I knew that change within me was something I must encounter.
While going through tribulations with my behavior my frustration was not only within me, everyone became a "problem". The only way I could truly change myself was to first grow up and recognize that my aggression was not only tearing me apart, I actually tore apart relationships. Admitting to
my faults was not easy nor was the task difficult. Change can occur too late for many, but for others change happens right on time.
On a daily I would think about the hearts that were broken, and use that as an example of why I needed to change my behavior. I believe in
Self-punishment to discipline one self, not through violence, through changing the heart. From me knowing the trouble I cause; I would look myself in the mirror and repeat: "I can't do this anymore" until I feel empathy in my heart. I forgive myself for any hurt I’ve ever caused. Hurting someone I had to forgive myself first before asking for
forgiveness from someone else.
My motivation of changing myself into being a woman consisted of me
knowing how well I was taught to treat people; I learned from my
parents. I felt bad when I struggled with myself because I strived of being a good person. My whole issue was I was afraid that my kindness would be taken for a weakness. Deep inside I knew who I was as a person. I fought many temptations to not being aggressive; anything that pissed
me off a tad I was in rage.
The term “earn respect” was another motivation for me to change; in order to earn respect I must first give it. Since Iam a beautiful person that was all people seen until I opened my mouth and spoke of negativity. Often people would ask me: “why you looking like that, put a smile on that pretty face”. After that compliment deep inside I would ask myself “why can’t my insides be as pretty as my outside appearance”. By me hurting others feelings that I did about I knew the change I must encounter was to grow up.
-Sameela Smith Eng.201A
While going through tribulations with my behavior my frustration was not only within me, everyone became a "problem". The only way I could truly change myself was to first grow up and recognize that my aggression was not only tearing me apart, I actually tore apart relationships. Admitting to
my faults was not easy nor was the task difficult. Change can occur too late for many, but for others change happens right on time.
On a daily I would think about the hearts that were broken, and use that as an example of why I needed to change my behavior. I believe in
Self-punishment to discipline one self, not through violence, through changing the heart. From me knowing the trouble I cause; I would look myself in the mirror and repeat: "I can't do this anymore" until I feel empathy in my heart. I forgive myself for any hurt I’ve ever caused. Hurting someone I had to forgive myself first before asking for
forgiveness from someone else.
My motivation of changing myself into being a woman consisted of me
knowing how well I was taught to treat people; I learned from my
parents. I felt bad when I struggled with myself because I strived of being a good person. My whole issue was I was afraid that my kindness would be taken for a weakness. Deep inside I knew who I was as a person. I fought many temptations to not being aggressive; anything that pissed
me off a tad I was in rage.
The term “earn respect” was another motivation for me to change; in order to earn respect I must first give it. Since Iam a beautiful person that was all people seen until I opened my mouth and spoke of negativity. Often people would ask me: “why you looking like that, put a smile on that pretty face”. After that compliment deep inside I would ask myself “why can’t my insides be as pretty as my outside appearance”. By me hurting others feelings that I did about I knew the change I must encounter was to grow up.
-Sameela Smith Eng.201A
# posted by : 10:36 AM
: 10:36 AM
Vonreesha Jackson
english 201 A
1-2:50
Changes that I have experienced are going back to school and my son going to preschool. Going to school for me has been a big change because I have never really liked going to school. The process of having to get up and be some where at a certain time just bothers me. I have always had a job that I didnt have to punch a clock. I could come in at anytime just long as I did eight hours a day. So school for me has been a big step, the same for my son to. He is four years old and has been home with myself or his dad most of the time. this year I decided to put him in preschool so he could get used to being around other children. He also has to get ready for kindergarden as well. The transition from being home all day to having to having to get up at a certain time and do all these things befor going to school has been ruff on him this past month. His first day was smooth because of all the excitement of gong to school. But the next day was worst, cause he "didnt want to go back ever he said". I made him go anyway and he cried and cried and I cried to cause it hurt my feelings to have to leave him with these strange people he had only met the day before. I left him anyway and of course when I came later to get him he was upset and still not wanting to go back. So I had to call in the inforcer his dad. To my surprise that didnt work he cried with him to, so we just left him there every day for 2 weeks and now when I go to pick him up he wants to stay and tells me to come back later. Its so cute and funny to hear him talk about school as if he has been going forever. The changes that we go through are all lifes little experiences that we have to go throgh to get to the next level.
english 201 A
1-2:50
Changes that I have experienced are going back to school and my son going to preschool. Going to school for me has been a big change because I have never really liked going to school. The process of having to get up and be some where at a certain time just bothers me. I have always had a job that I didnt have to punch a clock. I could come in at anytime just long as I did eight hours a day. So school for me has been a big step, the same for my son to. He is four years old and has been home with myself or his dad most of the time. this year I decided to put him in preschool so he could get used to being around other children. He also has to get ready for kindergarden as well. The transition from being home all day to having to having to get up at a certain time and do all these things befor going to school has been ruff on him this past month. His first day was smooth because of all the excitement of gong to school. But the next day was worst, cause he "didnt want to go back ever he said". I made him go anyway and he cried and cried and I cried to cause it hurt my feelings to have to leave him with these strange people he had only met the day before. I left him anyway and of course when I came later to get him he was upset and still not wanting to go back. So I had to call in the inforcer his dad. To my surprise that didnt work he cried with him to, so we just left him there every day for 2 weeks and now when I go to pick him up he wants to stay and tells me to come back later. Its so cute and funny to hear him talk about school as if he has been going forever. The changes that we go through are all lifes little experiences that we have to go throgh to get to the next level.
# posted by : 12:38 AM
: 12:38 AM
erica mitchell english 201A 8-8:50am
Hi, I could not find the August 29th post for this essay but here it is.
Changes in My Life
I have been through alot of changes. I started out going to college after high school then it took a change. I started working as a waitress thinking that was big money but it wasn't. I then went back to school changing my major from nursing to child development. When I started that one of my friends was giving me a daycare to run. Once again I stopped going to school to run that. I was talking tothe landlord then I was discurraged because he wanted to much for rent and for me to pay old bills he didn't get to. I then went back to school to this time do phsychology. I was doing good till I found another job that was paying good. I left school again. I stated working and after awhile I wanted to go back to school; so that is what I did. I went to Western Career College for Dental Assisting. I started that and then I was almost finished and then I stopped going to that. I left that job and then found another that paid a little more. I have stuck to this job for awhile now and still working there to this day. I was tired of getting nothing accomplish or you can say finished in my life. I would help everyone else accomplish their goals and not mine. This time I told myself it is me first and that is why I am back in school to accomplish my goals.
Hi, I could not find the August 29th post for this essay but here it is.
Changes in My Life
I have been through alot of changes. I started out going to college after high school then it took a change. I started working as a waitress thinking that was big money but it wasn't. I then went back to school changing my major from nursing to child development. When I started that one of my friends was giving me a daycare to run. Once again I stopped going to school to run that. I was talking tothe landlord then I was discurraged because he wanted to much for rent and for me to pay old bills he didn't get to. I then went back to school to this time do phsychology. I was doing good till I found another job that was paying good. I left school again. I stated working and after awhile I wanted to go back to school; so that is what I did. I went to Western Career College for Dental Assisting. I started that and then I was almost finished and then I stopped going to that. I left that job and then found another that paid a little more. I have stuck to this job for awhile now and still working there to this day. I was tired of getting nothing accomplish or you can say finished in my life. I would help everyone else accomplish their goals and not mine. This time I told myself it is me first and that is why I am back in school to accomplish my goals.
Joshua Brown-James
English 201A 1:00–2:50pm
August 31, 2008
Initial planning sheet
1. What is the subject of your paper? The subject of my essay is preparing to have a baby
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? I choose to write about this subject because this as one of the big changes in my life
3. What audience will you write for? The audience that i will write for is anyone who is planning on having a baby.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The questions i want my paper to answer is the changes that are positive and negative of preparing to have a baby.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? The main strategy I will use is, positives vs: negatives of having a baby.
Changes Outline
Thesis: Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable.
Body paragraphs: The different positive or negative changes I went through such as relationship change and emotional change.
Changes
Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable. When I first found out that I was having a baby I thought about all the changes that would happen in my life and I didn’t know how to deal with them. I would now have to sacrifice many things that I wasn’t too happy to give up. I went through emotional change, economic change, relationship and personal change. These are some of the changes I have gone through while preparing to have a baby.
I had to take on many responsibilities like working to provide for my family which I wasn’t prepared to do at such a young age. This was a problem for me because I never had a job before and all of a sudden I had to find work immediately which was hard to cope with. I now had to manage all of my money and not just blow it because I had many things to buy for the baby that were expensive. At first I didn’t know how I was going to pay for everything because one job wasn’t enough income to pay for everything I needed. A baby is a big responsibility that one has to be prepared for and this was a responsibility that I wasn’t prepared for.
The emotional change that I went through while preparing to have a baby was something that was greatly overwhelming. It was many times in which I felt like giving up but I knew this was something I couldn’t do. I had to please everyone, my girlfriend, her parents and my parents. Everyone expected me and only me to do things that I thought was impossible. My girlfriend expected me to be there and do everything she wanted at that particular day and time. Our parents kept asking when we were going to get married which was something I wasn’t prepared to do. I was only eight teen and it was bad enough that I was having a baby at such a young age. I often thought that I was going to be a bad father because I didn’t know how to take care of a baby. This was what I thought about the most because I wanted so bad to be a great father but I didn’t see how that was possible. This made me go crazy but I had to put all of my emotional problems to the side in order to be a great dad and to take care of my family.
My life was changed in various ways while preparing to have a baby that brought many problems that I wasn’t able to deal with. I had to take on many responsibilities. I went through emotional, economic, relationship and personal change. Changes are something that everyone goes through which makes their life different for better or worse. The change I went through changed my life for the worse at first, because of the enormous responsibilities I had to take on. It also will change my life because just waiting for the day when I can see and hold my baby brings me great joy.
English 201A 1:00–2:50pm
August 31, 2008
Initial planning sheet
1. What is the subject of your paper? The subject of my essay is preparing to have a baby
2. Why do you want to write about this subject? I choose to write about this subject because this as one of the big changes in my life
3. What audience will you write for? The audience that i will write for is anyone who is planning on having a baby.
4. What questions do you want your research to answer? The questions i want my paper to answer is the changes that are positive and negative of preparing to have a baby.
5. What is the main strategy you think you will use? The main strategy I will use is, positives vs: negatives of having a baby.
Changes Outline
Thesis: Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable.
Body paragraphs: The different positive or negative changes I went through such as relationship change and emotional change.
Changes
Preparing to have a baby was an overwhelming obstacle that changed my life in ways unimaginable. When I first found out that I was having a baby I thought about all the changes that would happen in my life and I didn’t know how to deal with them. I would now have to sacrifice many things that I wasn’t too happy to give up. I went through emotional change, economic change, relationship and personal change. These are some of the changes I have gone through while preparing to have a baby.
I had to take on many responsibilities like working to provide for my family which I wasn’t prepared to do at such a young age. This was a problem for me because I never had a job before and all of a sudden I had to find work immediately which was hard to cope with. I now had to manage all of my money and not just blow it because I had many things to buy for the baby that were expensive. At first I didn’t know how I was going to pay for everything because one job wasn’t enough income to pay for everything I needed. A baby is a big responsibility that one has to be prepared for and this was a responsibility that I wasn’t prepared for.
The emotional change that I went through while preparing to have a baby was something that was greatly overwhelming. It was many times in which I felt like giving up but I knew this was something I couldn’t do. I had to please everyone, my girlfriend, her parents and my parents. Everyone expected me and only me to do things that I thought was impossible. My girlfriend expected me to be there and do everything she wanted at that particular day and time. Our parents kept asking when we were going to get married which was something I wasn’t prepared to do. I was only eight teen and it was bad enough that I was having a baby at such a young age. I often thought that I was going to be a bad father because I didn’t know how to take care of a baby. This was what I thought about the most because I wanted so bad to be a great father but I didn’t see how that was possible. This made me go crazy but I had to put all of my emotional problems to the side in order to be a great dad and to take care of my family.
My life was changed in various ways while preparing to have a baby that brought many problems that I wasn’t able to deal with. I had to take on many responsibilities. I went through emotional, economic, relationship and personal change. Changes are something that everyone goes through which makes their life different for better or worse. The change I went through changed my life for the worse at first, because of the enormous responsibilities I had to take on. It also will change my life because just waiting for the day when I can see and hold my baby brings me great joy.
# posted by : 2:29 PM
: 2:29 PM
My paper will talk about a major change that happened in my life.
I want write about this subject because it might help some one else that could be going through the same thing I went through.
My audience I want to reach out to a rather broad audience.
The question I am aiming for my essay to answer is, knowing oneself important?
In this essay I will use problem and solution strategies
Thesis:
There is a dramatic change of the person you are in high school to the person become three years after high school.
My body paragraphs will cover the transformation, finding myself, also coming into adult and becoming a woman of responsibility.
Tipton
English 201B
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I want write about this subject because it might help some one else that could be going through the same thing I went through.
My audience I want to reach out to a rather broad audience.
The question I am aiming for my essay to answer is, knowing oneself important?
In this essay I will use problem and solution strategies
Thesis:
There is a dramatic change of the person you are in high school to the person become three years after high school.
My body paragraphs will cover the transformation, finding myself, also coming into adult and becoming a woman of responsibility.
Tipton
English 201B
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