Monday, March 23, 2009

 

Synthetica Essay

Today in class we discussed the recent tragic deaths in Oakland and wrote a letter in President Obama's voice to the citizens of Oakland. Please post these letters here. Students were asked to offer a solution to the citizenry so that perhaps such tragedies can be prevented in the future.

We then tackled a couple of quizzes and the essay based on errors from Synthtica.

Comments:
Sabah Said
3/23/09
English 201B
Mon/Wed 10-12

Free write: Response to the citizenship Oakland from Barack Obama about the incident.

To the Citizens of Oakland:

This past Saturday on March 21,2009, I found out an incident that happened in Oakland, Ca. A bad situation that couldn’t be solved or handled in a better way at the time. For cops shot by a young man around 26 or 27 years old, he was shot by the police when he tried to escaped and he’s also dead. Something so tragic and disappointing. I wish those people lives that past away, wouldn’t be where they are now. We want the bay area to be safe and everywhere else in the world. We want to avoid violence, and not be in dangerous positions. As president we cant go to the past in change the things that happen, so hopefully from now and on I could help improve and make a difference for our future. What has happen in the past, has effected us in many ways, god bless them and everyone else in the world.

Sincerely, President Barack Obama
 
Dear citizens of oakland,
I am astound by the recent events that have taken place in your city, and i send my deep condoliscence to you all. to the families of the ones who were lost for it is always sad to loose a close family or friend. to the citizens for the criminal activity and murders one must endure to reside in this city. I must say that we all need to re-evaluate our lives and make priorities to better ones self. we as the people need to at as neighbors, as a community, to look out for one another. stop pionting the blame at someone else and blame ourselves for these careless acts and stop demising one another. peace is waiting for us but untill we can unite and really point out the problem, we are here stuck in the middle of proverty and destruction. i say to my people, where will this world be in 5 years, how do you want your children to act and do? Is this really the lifestyle we want? well fellow citizens please be aware that the change starts with you, and from their we all can prosper. again i give my sincere apologies and know I am working on making life for you better. thank you.
byn jameisha harris
 
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