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I don't quite understand how to do this essay. The book does not tell you to write an introduction or an conclusion. Do i just post the error body paragraphs? Were certain errors assign to an student?
 

Pidd 1Jacky Leung
Professor Sabir
English 201B, MW 1-3
25 May 2009
Pidd Fails to Understand Parallel Structure
The authors of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to parallel structure. Parallel structure is the use of similar forms of words, phrases, clauses, or sentence structures. Using parallel structure helps create rhythm and balance in writing. (Pollitt and Baker 244-250). Stewart Pidd’s claim of having rhythm in his writing is unbelievable because he made many parallel structure errors in his essay “Donna Rama: Guano Queen or Maker of Trouble?”
Pidd does not match up verb phrases. He writes, “Donna likes to read thick books with no pictures and expressing contrary views…” (1). The verb phrases “to read” and “expressing” is lacking parallel structure. The infinitive verb phrase “to read” does not match the participial verb phrase “expressing.” Pidd has two options to make the phrases parallel. He can convert both phrases into infinitive phrases or participial phrases. The best correction will read, “Donna likes to read thick books with no pictures and to express contrary views…”
Pidd’s clauses lack parallel structure. He writes, “People balked; people gaped; cries were heard.” (2). The last clause lacks parallel structure. It is nonparallel because the last clauses does not rhythm with the first two clauses. Pidd can make the clause parallel by rewriting the last clause. The correction will read, ”People balked; people gaped; people cried.”
Pidd’s essay contains more non-parallel non phrases. He writes, “Donna would be giving up Lud’s scholarship money and adulation from the town.” (2). The noun phrases “Lud’s scholarship money” and “adulation from the town” lacks parallel structure. They are non-parallel because the possessive noun phrase do not match the preposition noun phrase. Pidd has two options to make the phrases parallel. He can convert both phrases into possessive or preposition phrases. The best correction will read, “Donna would be giving up Lud’s scholarship money and the town’s adulation.”
Pidd series of modifiers lack parallel structure. He writes, “A girl who was pretty, smart, and came from a low-income family…“ (2). The modifier “low income family” lacks parallel structure. It is non-parallel because the last phrase is not an adjective. Pidd can make the series parallel by making the last phrase an adjective. The correction will read, “A girl who was pretty, smart, and poor turn down the Bat Guano Queen crown.
Pidd fails to make his last series of clauses parallel. He writes, “Buy American, buy a lot, and you can also buy Chinese.” The last clause lack parallel structure. The first two clauses are parallel because “buy” is the subject. However, in the third clause, “you” is the subject. Pidd can make the clause parallel by rewriting the last clause. The corrected sentence will read, “If you can get a good deal at the BeauGus Superstore. Buy american, buy more, and buy Chinese.”
Stewart Pidd makes many parallel structure errors in his essay ““Donna Rama: Guano Queen or Maker of Trouble?” Pidd fails understand the rules to parallel structure. Instead of fancy talk, Pidd should review the rules to parallel structure.
 

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Works Cited
Pidd, Stewart “Donna Rama: Guano Queen or Maker of Trouble?” 22 May 2009.
Pollitt, Gary, and Craig Baker. Stewart Pidd Hates English. Fullerton, CA: Attack The Text Publishing, 2009