Wednesday, September 09, 2009

 

Essay 1...Holler

Today in both classes we played catch up. Many students had not completed the first two chapters in SPHE, so we weren't able to get to Holler Chapter 1 or finish talking about the rest of the Introduction. I will post a few more passages for students to paraphrase and a few questions to respond to. If you finish Chapter 1 by tomorrow and want Chapter 2 ask us for it. We made copies already.

Essay 1 is due Monday, Sept. 14 for a peer review. Bring in typed essays. If you were absent and missed getting a copy of the essay assignment sheet from SPHE or a copy of Holler Chapter 1, Dominique will host a study hour from 12-1 tomorrow, Thursday, Sept. 10, you can get a copy then. We will put copies in an envelop outside L-235 just in case.

Sunday, Sept. 13, is the anniversary of Tupac's death. Pour a libation for him and perhaps read one of his poems published after his death. Bring the collection--The Rose that Grew from Concrete, to class Monday,Sept. 14.

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Lornna Taylor
Professor Sabir
English 201a
15 September 2009.


Stewart Pidd’s Early Grammar Mistakes
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing a subject and verb, and forming part of a compound or complex sentence. There are two types of clauses, dependent clause (subordinate), and independent clause. The difference between the two clauses is the dependent clause cannot stand alone in a sentence. The independent clause can stand alone. A phrase contains a sequence of words intended to have meaning. Three common sentence punctuation errors are, fragments, a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. Run-on sentences, a word group containing two or more independent clauses without the proper punctuation separating them. Comma splices, is a type of sentence error that consists of two independent clauses, punctuated with only a comma.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes “His little step-by-step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase “His little step-by-step system for learning,” as a subject and a predicate. He can fix this error by connecting it into a sentence. To connect the phrases, Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentences with a comma. To convert the phrase, Pidd must make the “His little step-by-step system for learning,” phrase into a subject, a place, a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error when he writes,” when he canters out to his corvette. He needs to look out.” Pidd punctuates, “to his corvette”, the subordinate clause, with only a period. He can fix the error by connecting the subordinate clause, to the independent clause, or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause, Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause, or replace it with a comma. He can convert the period clause, into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinate conjunctions.
Pidd makes an run-on sentence error, when he wrote, “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” an “And”. Pidd has failed to punctuate, “I found this arrowhead” and “of his low-profile tires”. He can correct this error by separating the two subordinating clauses. To separate the two clauses, Pidd must add a comma after the first clause. Also replace the coordinating conjunction with a period or a semicolon.
Pidd makes a comma splice error, when he writes, “ I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake is between the words “on” and “I”. Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses with a comma. He can either separate the clauses, or subordinate one of them. Pidd can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma, or replace the comma with an semicolon, or period. Subordinating one of the clauses, Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to the sentence.
Stewart Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of turning in a paper with such punctuation errors, Pidd should have proof read his essay paper for correct punctuation.
 
Pidd 1
Earnest Davis
Professor Sabir
English 201a
15 September 2009
Passing English Class
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause, is a group of words containing a verb and a subject, forming part of a compound or complex sentences. There’s two clauses which are, dependent ( Also known as subordinate) and Independent clause. Difference between the two clauses is the subordinate (dependent) clause cannot stand alone in a full sentences, while the independent clause can stand alone. A phrase contains a sequence of words intended to have meaning. Three common sentence punctuations errors are,” fragments” meaning something incomplete and a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. Then, there’s,” run- on sentences’” a word group containing two or more independent clauses, without the proper punctuation separating them. Last would be,” comma splice”, a type of sentence error that consist of two independent clauses, punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “ Skating Rules” because there was no effort in his assignment.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “step-by-step system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase, “ step-by-step system for learning,” as a verb and subject. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or, by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase, Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To connect the phrase, Pidd must make the “step-by-step system for learning ,” phrase, a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause, “When he canters out to his Corvette, he needs to look out” with only a period. He can fix this error by, connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd need to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “period”.
Pidd makes a “run-on sentence” error. He writes, “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to purchase two independent clauses, “ I found this sick arrowhead” and “Of his low-profile tires.” He can fix thee errors by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can either, add a comma after the first independent clause. Replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon. Or you can replace the coordinating conjunction with a period.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes, “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the word “on” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “ I deserve at least a C,” with a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a subordinating conjunction after the comma, or replace the comma with a period or semicolon. To subordinate one of the clauses, Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
Stewart Pidd’s failure to correctly write sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of the run-on sentence, “ I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires” Pidd should have someone read over his work essay for punctuations, before turning it in.
 
Julianne Bauer
Professor Sabir
English 201B
September 20, 2009


Pidd Deserve a “D”
Writers must understand the rules when it comes to punctuating sentences correctly. They must understand that sentences can have different types of clauses and that different types of punctuation are needed in different cases. A clause is a group of words that consists of a subject and a verb. There are independent and subordinate clauses. The difference between the two is that an independent clause can stand alone as a complete sentence. The three most common punctuation errors are fragments, run-on sentences, and comma splices. A fragment can be either a phrase or a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence with a period at the end. Writing a fragment is Error 3. An example of error 3 is “His step-by-step system for learning.” A run-on sentence contains two independent clauses with no period separating them. Writing a run-on sentence is Error 4. An example of Error 4 is “If I skate. I win.” A comma splice contains two independent clauses with a comma separating them. Writing a comma splice is Error 5. An example of Error 5 is “I have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” Stewart’s paper called “Skating Rules” if full of these three punctuation errors. Each of these errors can be fixed in different ways. The teacher thinks that Stewart deserves a “D,” but Stewart thinks that he should earn at least a “C.” He doesn’t think that the teacher is very good.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “His little step-by-system for learning.” Pidd punctuates the phrase, “His little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase to a nearby sentence, Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase to a sentence, Pidd must make the phrase into a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause, “If I skate” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the subordinate clause to the independent clause, Pidd must omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. To convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause, Pidd must remove the subordinating conjunction.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd had failed to punctuate the two independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses, he can add a comma after the first independent clause, replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon, or replace the coordinating conjunction with a period.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes, “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I”. Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. To separate the clauses, he can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma, replace the comma with a semicolon, or replace the comma with a period. To subordinate one of the clauses, Pidd must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
My conclusion is that Stewart makes three different types of punctuation errors, and he needs to learn how to fix each of these errors. He should practice writing or get help from a tutor. This way, he can learn to write good essays that will earn “A”s from his teacher. I also think that he shouldn’t use slang words in his writing. He should use more regular words in his essays.
 
Kathleen Adams
English 201A
M-W 1-2:50
September 16, 2009
Free Write
A Rose that Grew From Concrete

What I gathered from this poem, is that no one thought that he would amount to anything. His mother was in and out of prisons. Often she had to pack up and move, due to her use of drugs and the choices she made. Tupac’s mother was very strong and self-educated. Contrary to what people thought or said, she and Tupac proved everyone wrong. She has given the world a great rose, full of beautiful petals that still resonate around the world today. It shows what ever you want for your life , you can have it.

10:40 PM
 
Julianne Bauer
Professor Sabir
English 201B
21 September 2009

The Rose The Grew from Concrete

Did u hear about the rose that grew from a crack
in the concrete
Proving nature's laws wrong it learned 2 walk without having feet
Funny it seems but by keeping its dreams
it learned 2 breathe fresh air
Long live the rose that grew from concrete
when no one else even cared!

When I read this poem, it made me think of what it was talking about. I thought maybe he was trying to say that when you see a homeless guy out in the streets or see someone needs help that you don't care about the person their just out there and you ignore them. And you walk by and don't even notice the person.
 
Kevan Peabody
Ms. Sabir
English 201a
09/11/2009


Punctuating English Class

In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing both a subject and a verb. The two types of clauses are both independent and subordinate. The difference between the two are that independent clauses can stand alone as a sentence and subordinate clauses cannot. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and verb. The three common sentence punctuation error are the comma splice, the run on sentence, and the fragment. A fragment is both a phrase and a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. A run on sentence is a word group containing two or more independent clauses without punctuation. A comma splice is a type of sentence error that consist of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors.
Pidd makes a fragment sentence error. He writes, “ his little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a Fragment sentence error. He writes, “when he canters out to his corvette.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “ When he canters out to his corvette,” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “When.”
Pidd makes a Run-on sentence error. He writes, “ I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low- profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrowhead” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “ I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low- profile tires,” joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the two clauses he can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a comma splice sentence error. He writes, “ I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” This mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clause or subordinate one of them. He can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma or replace the comma with a semicolon or a period. To subordinate one of the clauses he must add a subordinating conjunction to it.
Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of a Skating Drama Queen, Pidd should have chose Punctuating English Class.
 
Razo
Arely Razo
Professor Sabir
English 201B
14 August 2009

Rocking my Essay Grade

In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words containing a verb and a subject. The two types of clauses is a subordinate clause and an independent clause. The difference between the two is that a subordinate clause cannot stand alone and an independent clause can. A phrase is a group of words without a verb or subject. The three sentence punctuation errors are: comma splice, run-on-sentences and a sentence fragment. Fragment is a phrase or a subordinating clause punctuated as a sentence. Run-on-sentences is a group of words that contain two or more independent clauses without the proper punctuation separating them. A comma splice is a type of sentence error that consists of two independent clauses punctuated only with a comma. Pidd certainly does deserve a D on his paper “Skating Rules,” because of how many mistakes were made on his paper.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate. I win.” with only a period. He can fix the error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting into and independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or place it with a period. He can convert the subordinate clause into and independent clause by eliminating the
Razo
subordinated conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He punctuates the phrase “His little step-by-step system for learning.” He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence or by converting it into a sentence. To connect the phrase Pidd must replace the period of the nearby sentence with a comma. To convert the phrase to a sentence Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He punctuates the subordinate clause “When he canters out of his Corvette,” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinated clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “When.”
Pidd makes a run on sentence error. He writes, “I found this sick arrowhead and I’ll stick it into one of his low profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “and” and “I’ll.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses, “I found this sick arrowhead” and “I’ll stick it into one of his low profile tires.” He can fix the error by separating the two independent clauses. By separating the two clauses he can add a comma, or replace the coordinating conjunction with a period.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C!” The mistake occurs between the words “On” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses, “I do have a lot of drama going on” and “I deserve at least a C,” with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clauses or subordinate one of them. He can add a
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coordinated conjunction or replace the comma with a semi-colon or a period. He must add a subordinate conjunction to one of the clauses.
Pidds failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of trying to pop his teachers tire, Pidd should focus more on punctuation and studying.
 
Gaid 1

Kholood Gaid
English 201 A
Professor Sabir
September 15, 2009
Pidd’s learning system
In order to punctuate sentences correctly, writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A group of words containing both a subject and a verb is called a clause. There are two types of clauses: independent clause and a subordinate clause. An independent clause is a group of words that contains a subject and a verb and can stand alone as a sentence. A subordinate clause is a word group that functions as a modifier to an independent clause. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. There are three common sentence punctuations errors: A run-on-sentence, comma splice, and a fragment. A fragment is a subordinate clause punctuated as a period. A run-on-sentence is a word group containing two or more independent clauses joined together without punctuation. A comma splice is a punctuation error that consists of two or more independent clause punctuated with only a comma.
Pidds makes a fragment error. He writes “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate.” With only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause. To connect the clauses, Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating a subordinating conjunction “If.”
Gaid 2
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low profile tires.” The mistakes occurs between the words “arrowhead and I.” Pidd has failed to punctuate the two independent clauses. He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the clauses, Pidd can replace it with a semicolon and replace the coordinating conjunction with a period. He can also add a comma after the first independent clause.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clause or subordinate one of them. He can replace the comma with a semicolon and/or replace the comma with a period. Pidd can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma. To subordinate one of the clauses, Pidd must add a subordinate conjunction to it.
Stewart Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate the sentences is the reason why he dose not deserve a passing grade. Instead of playing in class and talking about winning and skating, Pidd should have been studying and listening to his coach about grammar and punctuations rules.
 
Kholood Gaid
English 201 A
Professor Sabir
September 15, 2009
Pidd’s learning system
In order to punctuate sentences correctly, writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A group of words containing both a subject and a verb is called a clause. There are two types of clauses: independent clause and a subordinate clause. An independent clause is a group of words that contains a subject and a verb and can stand alone as a sentence. A subordinate clause is a word group that functions as a modifier to an independent clause. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. There are three common sentence punctuations errors: A run-on-sentence, comma splice, and a fragment. A fragment is a subordinate clause punctuated as a period. A run-on-sentence is a word group containing two or more independent clauses joined together without punctuation. A comma splice is a punctuation error that consists of two or more independent clause punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors.
Pidds makes a fragment error. He writes “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate.” With only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause. To connect the clauses, Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating a subordinating conjunction “If.”
Gaid 2
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it into one of his low profile tires.” The mistakes occurs between the words “arrowhead and I.” Pidd has failed to punctuate the two independent clauses. He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses. To separate the clauses, Pidd can replace it with a semicolon and replace the coordinating conjunction with a period. He can also add a comma after the first independent clause.
Pidd makes a comma splice error. He writes “I do have a lot of drama going on, I deserve at least a C.” The mistake occurs between the words “on” and “I.” Pidd has punctuated two independent clauses with only a comma. Pidd can either separate the clause or subordinate one of them. He can replace the comma with a semicolon and/or replace the comma with a period. Pidd can add a coordinating conjunction after the comma. To subordinate one of the clauses, Pidd must add a subordinate conjunction to it.
Stewart Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate the sentences is the reason why he dose not deserve a passing grade. Instead of playing in class and talking about winning and skating, Pidd should have been studying and listening to his coach about grammar and punctuations rules.
 
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