Monday, October 31, 2011

 
Today in class students chose a poem we haven't read in class and 1. IDENTIFIED the THEME and 2. DEVELOPED a thesis sentence using TOPICAL INVENTION: definition, analogy, consequence, testimony (chose 1), 3. WROTE a 5 sentence introduction.

Students then evaluated another student's introductory paragraph noting the topic sentence, supporting sentences, which included evidence about the topic, ending the paragraph with an argument or thesis sentence.

Post the introductory paragraph, note the poem in your introduction and give us a synopsis of your peer review before posting your writing. Include a works cited with the introductory paragraph.

Homework is to read the poem again, which we read in class: "Love within a Storm" (85). The thesis is: LOVE HAS THE POWER TO CREATE A STORM. Make sure you cite the poem and the book at the end of the introductory paragraph.

Post the class assignment here. Bring the homework into class as a paper copy.

2. Revisions (handout).

Students have a week to revise and get an essay back in. The grade on the revision is the final grade, so get clarification before revising the essay.

3. Class format: Workshops

We will be reviewing writing concepts students might still be struggling with like Thesis Sentences, Introductions, Conclusions, Topic Sentences, Signal Phrases, Block Quotes, Evaluating Evidence, Citations, Paraphrasing.

This week we are working on Revision Strategies and Essay Structure: Introductions, Body, Conclusion.

We will spend next week writing the Pidd Essay covering the entire book. We will also complete Grammar Exam 2 and correct Grammar Exam 1.

I will give you a schedule on what we will cover over the next few weeks. Bring questions and if I am not covering something you'd like more clarification on let me know this week.

Comments:
Aman Bharji
Professor Sabir
English 201B 8 to 850
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

Elizabeth, A different love

Theme: relationship

Definition: A relationship is a bond that two individuals share in an intellectual, physical, or lovable way.

In the poem Elizabeth [,] A different Love is about a girl's emotions changing back and fourth with time. The relationship began when she was lost, and was lost after she found her soul. The protagonist see's the relationship transition negatively and wishes on a new outcome. The protagonist is willing to accept what happened to resurrect a bond with her.A relationship is a bond that two individuals share in an intellectual, physical, or lovable way.
 
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Aman Bharji
Professor Sabir
English 201B 8 to 850
31 October 2011

Works Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Aman Bharji
Professor Sabir
English 201B 8 to 850
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Love within a Storm" (85)

Topic:Love

Consequence:Love has the power to create a storm.

In the poem "Love Within a Storm" love has put the protagonist's through a stormy relationship. Making love in the worst times broke their bond leading them the opposite way. The eye of the storm wasn't helping either causing more distance between them. They waited for the storm to pass to see the conclusion.Love has the power to create a storm.

Works Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Jessica Tam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Introductory

Fear in the Heart of a man

Theme: boldness

Definition: Boldness is to stand up for oneself, bravery

In the poem, Fear in the Heart of man, Tupac wants to stand up against frail hearts. Boldness is better than being afraid. He cares for others in order to stand up against any person that would break one's heart. He will do whatever he can to break one's heart to defend. Boldness is to stand up for oneself.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Jessica Tam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50
31 October 2011


Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Love Within a Storm" (85)

Topic: Chaos

Analogy: In a relationship, there is chaos.

In the poem "Love Within a Storm" this relationship Tupac mentioned is unresolved. In a relationship there is chaos involved. Passion collided in between and the bond was gone. They waited for the storm to disappear. Love has the power to create a storm.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Selam Adam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Introductory

What Is It That I Search 4

Theme: imperfection

Definition: Imperfection is an uncomfortable feeling that doesn't allows you to live your life perfectly.

In the poem "What Is It That I Search 4", Tupac shows that he is looking for something in his life but he didn't find it yet. This shows that Tupac doesn't believe that his life is complete. His life still missing something and he is trying to find what missing though that he doesn't know what is it that he searches for.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Selma Adam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Love Within a Storm" (85)

Topic: Friendship

Consequence: True friendship can overcome the storm

In the poem "Love Within a Storm" Tupac expressed how the bond of friendship looks like. He shows that true friendship and true love can overcome the storm. He knows that to overcome the storms of friendship is difficult but not impossible and with your love and friendship you can pass the storm.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Jasmine Guillot
Professor Sabir
English 201B 8-8:50
31 October 2011

Topical Invention

The Fear in the Heart of a Man (31)

Theme: Fear

Definition: Fear is an overwhelming emotion where the individual is either taken by surprise or is feeling threatened by a person or object.

In the poem, "The Fear in the Heart of a Man," Tupac talks about how having this type of fear can make an individual feel secure around others and how their fear for danger turns into love from not only themselves but for others. Fear can make people feel threatened but also push people to want to overcome it.

Works Cited:
Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Corazon Tinio
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201a -8am

The Eternal Lament

Theme: regrets
Analogy: Tupac's regret make him realize to work harder and perfect his work, even when it comes to love, he likes to give his all.

     The poem is about Tupac's feeling of regret. Regrets that he has when he first given a chance to do certain things. Regrets of passing every opportunity he was given. Regrets in not giving his best or all for the opportunity in front of him. His regrets has something to do with him not achieving how he thinks it should, and short of meeting a goal. Tupac's regret make him realize to work harder and perfect his work, even when it comes to love  he likes to give his all.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Corazon Tinio 
Professor Wanda Sabir 
English201A - 8am
1 November 2011

Forever and Today

Theme: emotion
Analogy: The emotion that should be enjoyed with pleasure but it begins today.

    In the poem, Forever and Today, Tupac Shakur talks about the emotion of ones love. The emotion that changes anytime and complex. The emotion of loving someone at the moment. The loving emotion that stays forever but not identified at the moment. The emotion that should be enjoyed with pleasure but it begins today.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Manuel Flores
Professor Sabir
English 201a 8-850
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"My Dearest one!!"(39)

Theme:love

Definition:giving the someone the power to hurt you but, trusting they wont.

In the poem My dearest one, its about Tupac finding his dream girl. He thanks the lord for blessing him with this beautiful girl. She is worth more than money or even lots of gold. He is so grateful for the love he has and is not going to take it for granite. Love is giving the someone the power to hurt you but, trusting they wont.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Selma Adam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
31 October 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Love Within a Storm" (85)

Topic: Friendship

Consequence: True friendship can overcome the storm.

In the poem "Love Within a Storm" Tupac expressed how the bond of friendship looks like. He shows that true friendship and true love can overcome the storm. He knows that to overcome the storms of friendship is difficult but not impossible. With your love and friendship you can pass the storm. True friendship can overcome the storm.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Selma Adam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
1 November 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Forever and Today" (55)

Topic: Doubt in love

Consequence: Doubt in love can make one confused about his or her feelings.

In the poem "Forever and Today", Tupac wants to know if his girl will love him today and forever. The girl says she will love him forever but Tupac wants to make sure if she loves him today and will love him forever. Tupac knows that he love the girl but he doubts in the girl's love. He wants to have the answer in order to make up his mind and know what to do if she loves him today and forever or not. Doubt in love can make one confused about his or her feelings.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Jasmine Guillot
Professor Sabir
English 201B 8-8:50
01 November 2011

Topical Invention
"Forever and Today" (pg. 85)

Theme: Love
Definition: a feeling of affection or compassion towards another.

Love is the type of feeling or emotion that an individual has when he or she cares for someone, whether it is romantic or not. Love can make people closer to those around them and make themselves feel happy that they love someone. In the poem, "Forever and Today", Tupac Shakur talks about how he wants to know if he can love someone who will be able to give the love back to him. This type of feeling can be confusing and complicated when trying to choose someone to love. The confusion of an individual when being in a relationship causes stress and thought about not only their partner but themselves.
 
Michelle Nam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50AM
1 November 2011

Topical Invention
Love within a storm (p.85)

Theme: friendship
Definition Friendship comes likes a storm

In the poem love within the storm Tupac had expressed the overcome in the storm and the friendship bond was lost. The friendship was impossible and the love of friendship bonds can overcome the storm.
 
Michelle Nam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50AM
1 November 2011

Topical Invention
Forever and Today (p. 55)

Theme: Love
Definition: loving one another and feelings

In the poem “forever and today” shows the love and emotion of one to another. It shows the care for someone and love can make people closer to those around them and Tupac talks about how he can love someone who loves him back as Afeni Shakur his mother have. He wants some answers and the confusion of love with relationship develops into feelings.
 
Corazon Tinio
Professor Wanda Sabir 
English 201A-8am
31 October 2011

Love Within A Storm

Theme: quarrel
Analogy: 
   
      In the poem of Tupac Shakur, Love Within A Storm, speaks about a quarrel in a relationship. A quarrel that creates a magnitude emotions towards each other. A quarrel that feels like a storm which creates catastrophe in a relationship. A quarrel that no matter what each other feels, they will still have friendship. The poem  speaks of great love that no quarrel can break their friendship  apart.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Corazon Tinio
Professor Wanda Sabir 
English 201A-8am
31 October 2011

Love Within A Storm

Theme: quarrel
Analogy: The poem  speaks of great love that no quarrel can break their friendship  apart.
   
      In the poem of Tupac Shakur, Love Within A Storm, speaks about a quarrel in a relationship. A quarrel that creates a magnitude emotions towards each other. A quarrel that feels like a storm which creates catastrophe in a relationship. A quarrel that no matter what each other feels, they will still have friendship. The poem  speaks of great love that no quarrel can break their friendship  apart.


Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Jessica Tam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50
2 November 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

"Forever and Today" (55)

Theme: confusion

Definition: Confusion is not knowing or not clear.

In the the poem "Forever and Today", Tupac explains how love can be confusing in the relationship. Confusion is not knowing or not clear. Tupac discusses how he does not know if he made her mad but he wants her to to forgive him. "Not know ing if ones true love is committed to the relationship can make one doubtful.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amaru. The Rose That grew from Concrete.Steinberg, Leila. New York. MTV Books. 1999. Print.
 
Aman Bharji
Professor Sabir
English 201B
2 November 2011

Forever and Today

Doubt in love can be one confused about his(her) feelings.

Topic: Confusion

In the poem, "Forever and Today" is about love putting the a male character in a state of confusion with a female character. The male character starts to ask questions while hoping for a certain response. He is doubtful about her feelings so he wants to know if the love is mutual. If so , he will be able to start his day. Doubt in love can be one confused about his(her) feelings.

Works Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Aman Bharji
Professor Sabir
English 201B
2 November 2011

Forever and Today

Doubt in love can be one confused about his(her) feelings.

Topic: Confusion

In the poem, "Forever and Today" is about love putting the a male character in a state of confusion with a female character. The male character starts to ask questions while hoping for a certain response. He is questioning her feelings because he wants to know if the love is mutual. If so, he will be able to start his day. Doubt in love can make one confused about his(her) feelings.

Works Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Markese Bell
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201B 8-8:50am
3 November 2011


Forever and Today (55)

Topic: Emotion of Love

In the poem, "Forever and Today," is talks about the emotions of love from a mans point-of-view. He trying to find out if the love is forever. Although the girl said that she will be with him forever, but his emotions is questioning she love. He wants to have her but he doesnt know her love today will be the future of forever.



Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
Manuel Flores
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
3 November 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

Forever and Today

Theme:dough

Definition:to not be sure or question reality.

In the poem "forever and today", Tupac is talking to a girl about love. He questions the love she has for him. He was never loved by a woman because his mom abandon him. He just wants to make sure what he has is right. Tupac dough's his love, things are to good to be true.
 
Manuel Flores
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
3 November 2011

Topical Invention 5 Paragraphs

Forever and Today

Theme:dough

Definition:to not be sure or question reality.

In the poem "forever and today", Tupac is talking to a girl about love. He questions the love she has for him. He was never loved by a woman because his mom abandon him. He just wants to make sure what he has is right. Tupac dough's his love, things are to good to be true.

Work Cited

Shakur, Tupac Amura. The Rose That grew From Concrete. Ed. Leila Steinberg. New York. MTV Books, Pocket Books. 2000. Print.
 
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