Monday, November 28, 2011
Social Entrepreneur Essays
Today in class I read student Social Entrepreneur essays. I am pleased to say, all the essays I read received passing grades. Students were told what to do to improve them. Some essays were too short. The reason why I want to see these essays is so that I can let students know if they are passing the course. If you cannot write a passing essay, you will not pass the course, and I can drop students up to Nov. 30.
Organization
Follow the outline I gave you. If you answer the questions, you have an essay. A few writers did not give examples of the people served by the business, nor did most of the essays give a detailed analysis on why the person felt compelled to do what they are doing.
Sample Essays
Markese does a good job in answering this question about his social entrepreneur.
Survey Essay
While I was reading students continued writing or started the Stewart Pidd Hates English survey essay. This essay in first person looks at the semester long SPHE experience. Manuel has a really great introduction for those who need a model to start.
Revisions
I also looked at a few revisions of the Grammar Exam correction essay/evaluation. Students are not reading these essays aloud, so there are lots od errors one could catch if he or she proof read the essay.
For the revisions of the essays on Hip Hop culture, the same was true for the essay I read. 1. The student didn't go deep enough, and 2. the student didn't give any examples to support his claims.
Note: Students are also using contractions in their scholarly essays. Stop.
Presentations
Tomorrow we will continue writing the Pidd Survey essays and complete the SE essay, write an abstract and get ready for presentations Wednesday and Thursday. The presentation is optional.
Do not waste our time. Make sure if the person is an artist, bring in work for us to see. If they are a musician, we want to hear a part of a song. Also give us the lyrics.
Bring in CDs and DVDs and VHS tapes, books, magazines, films, etc. You will have 3-5 minutes to present. Afterward there will be a cyber-assignment, self-reflection and student feedback. This will go into your portfolio.
Errors
Some students had so many errors on their first drafts, I suggested they identify the errors and let me see the draft before they start on revision. You grade drops for all the errors which we covered this semester, so pay attention and submit your best work. Some students are making the same mistakes over and over again.
Make a list of these errors and check your final draft for them.
Today in class I read student Social Entrepreneur essays. I am pleased to say, all the essays I read received passing grades. Students were told what to do to improve them. Some essays were too short. The reason why I want to see these essays is so that I can let students know if they are passing the course. If you cannot write a passing essay, you will not pass the course, and I can drop students up to Nov. 30.
Organization
Follow the outline I gave you. If you answer the questions, you have an essay. A few writers did not give examples of the people served by the business, nor did most of the essays give a detailed analysis on why the person felt compelled to do what they are doing.
Sample Essays
Markese does a good job in answering this question about his social entrepreneur.
Survey Essay
While I was reading students continued writing or started the Stewart Pidd Hates English survey essay. This essay in first person looks at the semester long SPHE experience. Manuel has a really great introduction for those who need a model to start.
Revisions
I also looked at a few revisions of the Grammar Exam correction essay/evaluation. Students are not reading these essays aloud, so there are lots od errors one could catch if he or she proof read the essay.
For the revisions of the essays on Hip Hop culture, the same was true for the essay I read. 1. The student didn't go deep enough, and 2. the student didn't give any examples to support his claims.
Note: Students are also using contractions in their scholarly essays. Stop.
Presentations
Tomorrow we will continue writing the Pidd Survey essays and complete the SE essay, write an abstract and get ready for presentations Wednesday and Thursday. The presentation is optional.
Do not waste our time. Make sure if the person is an artist, bring in work for us to see. If they are a musician, we want to hear a part of a song. Also give us the lyrics.
Bring in CDs and DVDs and VHS tapes, books, magazines, films, etc. You will have 3-5 minutes to present. Afterward there will be a cyber-assignment, self-reflection and student feedback. This will go into your portfolio.
Errors
Some students had so many errors on their first drafts, I suggested they identify the errors and let me see the draft before they start on revision. You grade drops for all the errors which we covered this semester, so pay attention and submit your best work. Some students are making the same mistakes over and over again.
Make a list of these errors and check your final draft for them.
Comments:
<< Home
Selma Adam
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
November 29, 2011
Social Entrepreneur
The social entrepreneur profile is Dr. John Wood. John Wood impressed me. He identified a problem that many poor countries suffered from. His vacation to Nepal and the sentence that he heard from a school's headmaster changed his life. In Nepal he started an organization that called Room to Read. He saw that many children couldn't afford to go to school and those rural schools had a chronic shortage of books. It spurred woods to start Room to Read, a literacy program that now helps educate millions of children. The relationship to the community is very close since he helps erase illiteracy. This issue is being addressed because the community need like this organization to erase illiteracy. Local citizens are involved because they are the ones that being educated. The community owns the process because it's in their community, where they get education. He was one of the greatest social entrepreneurs in United States of America and the whole world who helped the poor children get good education.
Post a Comment
Professor Wanda Sabir
English 201A 8-8:50am
November 29, 2011
Social Entrepreneur
The social entrepreneur profile is Dr. John Wood. John Wood impressed me. He identified a problem that many poor countries suffered from. His vacation to Nepal and the sentence that he heard from a school's headmaster changed his life. In Nepal he started an organization that called Room to Read. He saw that many children couldn't afford to go to school and those rural schools had a chronic shortage of books. It spurred woods to start Room to Read, a literacy program that now helps educate millions of children. The relationship to the community is very close since he helps erase illiteracy. This issue is being addressed because the community need like this organization to erase illiteracy. Local citizens are involved because they are the ones that being educated. The community owns the process because it's in their community, where they get education. He was one of the greatest social entrepreneurs in United States of America and the whole world who helped the poor children get good education.
<< Home
